Black Poetry : Show Them That You Care

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  1. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lifetime review we're all going there!

    SHOW THEM THAT YOU CARE

    Out of time trying to face my fears

    HOW WELL HAVE YOU FAIRED?

    How about when I prayed so well

    In disgrace backsliding ya'll

    SINFUL MAN...

    Make the call I seek remedy

    On my knees swear off the enemy

    WHAT'S YOUR PLAN?

    Write love songs to the world at large

    Right the wrong I've done for far too long

    AIN'T YOU BAD ~

    Heal the hurt besmirching anyone

    Know the difference between right and wrong

    SIN UNDONE...

    Love my neighbor denying self

    Never kill again no lies to tell

    PRAISE THE LORD!

    Before I die please forgive me then

    Lay down my life to take it up again

    Better now than I was before

    I'm your man in the end

    YOU DON"T HAVE A PRAYER

    Spirit move what else can I do?

    SHOW THEM THAT YOU CARE


    Darryl Abdu Omari :hearts2:
    aka 1poetsought ~ copyright 2005
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's not in the words we say, it's in our actions. Flow with the truth 1poet.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece makes the reader think on a spiritual level. Very nice transitions in this piece thanks for sharing.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one's tongue can be a snake and to think of the acts behind it
    this was tyte i love the 2 in 1 flow of this as i read it twice
     
  5. Khasm13

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    say it louder my man....
    this was a moral masterpiece...
    everyone need to read this....word

    one love
    khasm
     
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    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As our devine Brother said, it's not what U put in your mouth that makes U unclean, but what comes out of it.

    Mad claps, snaps, headnods 4 this.

    Speak on it.
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great flow. First I read it in it's entirety. Then I only read the Purple words. Great message and questions to ponder. I would say I have faired well!
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    URGENT

    I am on a mission to demonstrate real care and concern for you, you & you! :run:
     
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    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fairly done

    It tells me how much i should work to be wha God wants me to be!
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So true, so true...

    this line set the entire tone for the piece...
    and spoke VOLUMES before you even began
    the second line

    we live in such an individualistic society these days
    we need the enligtened ones to write...so that
    the lost may read...and walk therein

    You are a beacon!

    Loveisglue...
    Sage
     
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