Poetry Critiques : Should you care or do you chose to ignore( not a poetic write)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by nevar, Dec 16, 2007.

  1. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now I am a realist why because I am the realistic person you could ever meet
    Now I got somethings on my narrow wide chest
    That needs to be spoken
    This year has been nothing but a backward year
    a year of no
    prosperity
    war increase
    hunger increased
    homelessness increased
    jobs are scarce
    and the price of gas is more than I care to pay for
    They say is America the beautiful
    Our men and fine woman that go to war and lose their life over
    this great Country
    Now I know your about to be blown with what I about to say
    But the bible say, "THE TRUTH IS THE LIGHT AND IT WILL SET YOU FREE"
    Ladies and gentlemen we are sending babies to war not grown men
    Our babies are dying for a war that God does not advocate
    We have corruption behind every government affiliation thats out there
    Tell me my sista and brother what are we really fighting for
    I think this year for me has been about get by instead of
    Prosperity
    This christmas so many families have nothing to give but remember gifts aren't that important
    What's important that you have the necessitites in life such as food and shelter
    I know familes that have been throwed out in the streets just so that a major developer can increase their property
    Tell me is that right
    Healthcare taking another cut
    What is it going to take America for us to take heed
    People are dying on this homeland because we pretend we don't have the resources to help the needy
    I guess they are saying less people we have to feed or see about
    If you don't think thats the case then go seek some help and see won't the door be closed to your needs
    This presidential election we have two hopefuls
    Black president and a woman
    Now I will say this race shouldn't be your main concern your concern should be on the qualifications
    My vote is leaning more toward the Woman
    Man you have had it so long and now it is time for a Woman to come in clean house
    And I believe that is why man is scrambling like field mice because they know a woman will get the job done right
    Think about it
    Health care will be for all
    Housing will be affordable for all
    More jobs will be created
    And the increase of crime will probably be down
    Because you would have given man a chance to make a decent living
    Don't you think they won't to make a honest living
    But what must you do if your being rejected
    even tho you have a education
    I think I heard the chief say one time America was on track
    on whose track
    Where Im from everything off track
    So I ask my sisters and brothers which side will you choose
    Do we chose to keep struggling or do we chose to see a better tomorrow
    for our kids and their kids
    I chose to stand for the truth
    Should you care or do you chose to ignore..................:
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  2. 1poetsought

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    SPEAK

    I enjoyed your bold and honest take, Sis.

    You obviously CARE a great deal :hearts1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    agree wit cha whole heartly
     
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    I Don't Care About America

    Land of the free...
    Home of the brave...
    Dirty money is
    "The American Way"

    Nothing good comes from dirty money
    Money is the root of all evil
    Money has corrupted America
    And money has corrupted my people

    Home of the brave is home of the slave..
    so how can I be free
    When I feel that even the NAACP and Al Sharp
    don't give 2 cents about me..

    You want me to care bout global warming...
    well I gotta feed my son
    I didn't mess up this Coutry..
    don't know how to undo what's been done

    Spend my doe for Christmas..
    nah, I'm heating up my home
    Cause I had a man and he left me here
    and I gotta do this on my own..

    So what do I care about ....
    I care about us first...
    Black people.. my people
    becasue we have always had it the worst!

    So I will rise up..
    meet with soldiers figure out how to help the Jenna Six..

    So I will rise up..
    talk to my sistah's and bothah's say our families need to be fixed

    So I will rise up.. and say real bold..
    America is not for me..
    And the day I realized I'm fighting for us not them
    is the day I was set free....

    America.. America...
    will always leave you scared...
    So I don't put my faith in American or it's men...

    I only put my faith in God......

    And who is God... yea, he is the light.. he also is "I AM"
    and "I AM" hiphop... HipHop rules.....

    I know there's a few "soldiers" out there who understand!
     
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    No, it has not been a year of prosperity, it's been a year of struggle. As far as voting, will we vote at all, and if we do, will our true votes even be counted? Makes me wanna holla. Speak on nevar, and welcome back.
     
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    Hi Sister nevar
    You hit on some good points in your drop. As long as we vote for
    who we think will make a different maybe some real changes will come about.
    Keep it coming


    Peace~N~Love
     
  7. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love given to me...............i appreciate it.........
     
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    you need to print this up and spread it all over

    america

    people won't understand

    UNTIL IT REALLY HITS HOME

    then it TOO LATE

    i love and felt your passion here

    and agreed with most of what you had to say

    great job sista raven

    peace
     
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    Wonderful Words Nevar
    It is Tome for the right person to come now
    People need to be free
    I pray it comes soon
     
  10. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    again i thank you for the love given to me
     
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