Black Poetry : Short Sumthin'

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by AgAbus, Sep 13, 2008.

  1. AgAbus

    AgAbus Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    [before]





    i'm

    impressed with

    the way you

    wrestle winds

    and the power of you

    shaking ill-will

    from the four

    corners of earth.

    u are

    something

    cosmic...almost

    abstract, but

    definitely here...definitely

    leaving marks and

    impressions

    across my

    mental.

    *****************************

    [after]



    (haiku)



    i can smell souls press'd

    against the roof of your mouth

    so much death-i'll cry


    ***********
    (sonku)



    what reason

    cud i give

    for movin

    on? u

    seemed ready

    to hitchhike.







     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte scribing da before and after
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is very unique in itself, thanks poet!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes you look at the before and after of a relationship, and wonder, what happened to all that promise. I enjoyed the different poetic genres incorporated into this piece.
     
  5. AgAbus

    AgAbus Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WATZ...
    QUEEN...
    RICH...

    thank you beautiful souls for supporting this brotha here. I appreciate you greatly. I'm humbled deeply!

     
  6. triniti424

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    You give me the feel of a songwriter. Are you a songwriter brotha? Perhaps something to look into if youre not... being able to manuever emotions in as few or as many words as necessary... lovely :) Enjoyable read poet :)
     
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