Black Poetry : short letter no. 1

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by AgAbus, Jul 5, 2008.

  1. AgAbus

    AgAbus Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my man brought
    orgasms in chocolate encased
    moans and groans-
    designed to steal my
    attention.
    my man wore
    kindness that covered
    up the stench of
    coffin
    stained breath
    where lies died and decayed.
    my man
    makes me
    want to retire ‘us!’



    © 2008 ((( AgAbus )))




     
  2. watzinaname

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    The following lines had me seeing 2 sides of this poetic coin:

    There's the positive interpretation, that the man is so kind that his kindness overshadowed the lies of past loves. Or the man is a liar, but wears his kindness like a veil that covers up his lies. What say you, poet?
     
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    AgAbus:
    Since I'm trying to think and live in the positive Im going to go with that interpetation. My 1st read of the piece had me smiling & snapping. watz you do make a good point though. But I guess thats poetry for ya....
    Either way its a very nice write.



    Much Luv
     
  4. AgAbus

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    sister watz...go with the second point...he covers up his lies with kindness...
    sister 4ever...go right along with Watz on this one! Thank you beautiful queens for supporting this lil ole poet! :SuN020::jawdrop:
     
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    all i see is the cover up of lies wit an act of kindness where one's showed
    by the oil can of deception.
     
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    Masterpiece done by one of the masters of piecing together poetry
     
  7. AgAbus

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    Brotha RICH and Phenom...yo I appreciate you both for the love and support! :SuN030:
     
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