Quiet Poetry Lounge : SHORT FLOW (DEFIANTSON)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by sheikdadon, Aug 30, 2006.

  1. sheikdadon

    sheikdadon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    U ASKED BOUT DA REVOLUTION......

    THE REVOLUTION LIKE GILL SCOTT HERON SAID
    WONT BE TELIVISED LIKE BLAKS DAT END UP DEAD
    WE SIT UP AND AIMLESSLY GRIPE N COMPLAIN
    BUT WE REFUSE TO VOTE AGAIN N AGAIN
    WHEN WE GO TO FIGHT WAR WE LOSE LIFE
    SIT AT HOME SAYIN WUT AINT RIGHT
    WE TRY TO EMACIPATE BEINGS WHO RETALIATE
    NOT KNOWIN DA CHAIN REACTION 1 COOD CREATE
    EACH ONE TEACH 1 BUT WE LAUGH AT IGNORANCE
    DESTROYIN; PROGRESS DIGRESSES BACK SIX PENCE
    WE PAY TAXES Y NOT SEE N HAVE A SAY WHERE IT GOES
    CITY HALL MEETINGS MOST CONSTITUENTS DONT GO
    I POSE DEEP QUESTIONS
    TIRED OF MILLENIUM DEPRESSION
    2 KEEP IT SHORT N BRIEF
    CHANGE STARTS WIT I N BENEFITS MORE THAN ME
    DONT TALK GET INVOLVED IN YA COMMUNITY
    BLESSED TO HAVE MORE POSITIVE MOMENTS
    THATS MORE TIME LIKE MONEY JUST SPENT
    WE EMBELISH DA TRUTHS ..... 2 B CONT'D......STAY TUNED
     
  2. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dope now get away from the rhyming and use line breaks. Have stanza it alows you to breath. Rhyming is cool when you trying to rap not all poetry rhymes. Its about the wording and what you are saying. Convay your message to your audience and make them feel your words.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome flow u took me there fo real keep doing it !!!

    awaiting the continue of this joint .
     
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