Black Poetry : She's not mine!

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  1. luvNwords

    luvNwords Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Its amazing how a few spoken words
    can change a persons life."I love you" can bring
    some joy, "I hate you" can bring others pain.
    I never really thought about it until the
    day when two words were spoken to me,
    "She's yours", though i must admit
    i wasnt prepared to be a parent yet
    but she didnt ask to be here, so
    i had to put aside my fears
    and take on some responsibilty.
    I didnt know the first thing about
    being a parent, i couldnt even
    hold my child without squirming in
    fear that i would drop her. But as
    the days went by, my fear turned into
    unspeakable joy. Ive never loved anyone
    as much as i love her, the way she smiles
    showing off her bare gums made me feel
    something that i've never felt before.
    Nothing else mattered to me anymore,
    this little person had given me something
    that was priceless. And all i wanted to do
    was spend my life making my daughter happy.
    But all good things must come to an end.
    Two words brought me so much joy, and
    three words brought me just as much pain.
    "She's not yours"!!!!!!I cant put into words
    the pain that went thru me as she told me
    the little girl i had come to love wasnt mine.
    I can still see her smile in my dreams, and
    i wish with everything in me that she is
    mistaken, but deep down i know that sweet
    little angel belongs to someone else!!
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Although a cruel and unusual punishment, every person deserves to be loved.

    Great piece of writing!
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very movin..
    with alot of emotion in it
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lovin' yo flow. Saw tha vibez.
     
  5. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the power of words...
    especially when a
    child is involved
    this was an incredibly
    moving piece

    some words simply shoudn't be spoken
    unless they hold the truth...
    the damage that is brought otherwise
    can't often be undone
     
  6. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    now thats just wrong :(
    people need to watch what they say...
    matters of the heart are too sensitive...
    my compassion goes out to you :grouphug:
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dayum, I hurt for you. I'm so sorry, bro. :grouphug:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so touching and well felt
    u scribe it wit high emotions
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel your pain and i am so so sorry...much love to you
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...this was a passionate piece...
     
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