Black Poetry : she

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by StarGoddess, Jun 22, 2001.

  1. StarGoddess

    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she

    appeared out of nowhere,
    a sweet faced soft voiced blur
    that smelled of clouds and rainbows,
    smiling shyly at him,
    constructioning in him the strongest urge to touch
    her hair, her skin...
    find some way to get in...
    and make her his only sin.

    she

    came along and held his hand
    face open as she vowed to understand
    all of the jibberish and confusion he uttered into her ear
    in the early dark daylight hours of the morning...
    surprising himself that he had so much to tell,
    spilling his sorrow and anger and regret in her soul
    so that

    she

    could transform it into a bright light
    that she swathed him in...
    forgiving him instantly for his trespasses and misgivings-
    he never knew how redeeming confession could be.

    she

    came forth
    and gave him all that she had,
    love apparent in her touch and kiss
    as her eyes whispered promises of always-
    by his side when the world beat him down,
    wiping tears of frustration from his eyes
    and hate from his brow
    to hold it in her hands and crush it into oblivion...
    vehemently blaspheming those who opposed him.

    she

    scared him silly with her honesty-
    love always has to leave,
    so before it left him, he foolishly left her,
    purposly betraying her and daring her to stay...
    praying her to stay
    and prove to be true in the ways
    that all else had went astray.
    heated by her kisses and freed by her touch...
    he had grown to love it too much,
    frightened by the feeling only ever envoked by

    she.

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  2. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lovin' this piece, dear friend. keep on scribin', as i continue to watch.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    DAYUMMMM!!

    U OFF THE HOOK I SEE
    THE POTION IS RUBBING OFF
    ON YA INK......FLOW HEAD
    MO' MO' MO':toast:
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight...i likes this
    it was smooth and ease to read nice scribe...
     
  5. PurpleMoons

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    Very beautifully posed!

    Love the drop!
     
  6. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whew...that poem really had me on the edge of my seat....it wasn't a thriller or an action packed movie,but your words made it feel like one...flow on poet this poem was m a h v e l o u s
     
  7. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a wonderful piece, enjoyed reading it...keep your pen handy cause you're doing a awesome job.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a great one to bring back. It was of course, an awesome write, and it flowed so smoothly. But other than that, there is so much truth in those wrods, how something so pure can scare the heck out of you, even when you love it so.