Black Poetry : She was...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Feb 4, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    For 4 months i studied her movement like she was my major
    n wanted to taste her chocolate skin like it was my favorite flavor
    i even worshipped her presence like she was my savior
    n went to her every event like she was my favorite player
    she had become like the tastebud to my tongue
    n had become the purpose to everything i ever done
    her face had become the poster on my wall
    she had become the ditch to make me fall
    she had become a dream n her leavin was like a nightmare
    i got so excited to be near her that bein in her presence was like bein at a fair
    she gave love songs a purpose
    and watchin these men chase her, made me understand why there was a circus
    she became my definition to purity and perfection
    with her i didnt have any answers, but quite a few questions
    but she was a thief, she stole the words right out of my mouth
    i'd say i was "so gone", but im still here, my head was just gone in the clouds
    she became the ink to my pen
    the title to my poetry that came from within
    i stared into her eyes until i seen her vision
    i locked myself into her beauty until she became my prison
    i read her until she became my favorite book
    she had become the never ending story witha vibrant hook
    i wanted a chance to get some type of affiliation
    4 months ago to now... it took all that n sh*t for her to just ignore the situation...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well i be .......after 4 long months
    keep flowing from heart soon one will
    notice ya emotions ......let it flow out
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This sounded very heartfelt. And it seems like your heart is in the right place.
     
  4. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall...
     
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    lolol...hmmm
    sounds like this gurl i liked in highschool...
    keep em come'n gurl
    one love
    khasm
     
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    Whoa...

    Now that's what I call your everything that is your none.

    I've been there a few times m'self, admiring secretly.

    Nice piece.