Black Poetry : ~She Walked Away~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Her baby cries
    But she could careless when she's on her high
    Shooting up until she can no longer stand
    Passing out on the sofa with the needle in her hand

    Wakes up and the baby is asleep
    Or is she?
    She runs and checks for a heartbeat
    Thump...Thump...Thump...Thump...
    Surely but slowy

    She don't know what to do
    She spends all her money on drugs instread of baby food
    Covers up her ears from the loud cries of hunger
    She screams from the top of her lungs she can't take it any longer
    She never had plans of being a single mother

    She looks at her child
    The baby wakes up and her eyes meet
    Mother cracks a painful smile
    Mother wishes she never awoke from her sleep
    Cause she senses her child senses the sin she is about to commit

    Baby Cries
    Mohter Cries
    Wraps her up in a thick blanket and takes her outside
    Mother finds a dark alley
    Baby's cries grow louder
    Mother picks up speed
    Stops...
    Lifts the top up
    The strong stinch makes her throw up

    Mother puts the top down
    Turns and walks the other way
    Silenty the baby's cries fades away



    come again
     
  2. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOA!

    So many have literally thrown their children in the dumpster and so many have figuratively thrown their children away. We live in a society where mothers commit unatural acts everyday...and it seems it's getting easier and easier..."To walk away".
    Masterpiece material scribe...keep on doing ya thang!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    SPEAK DA TRUTH SO EARS MAY HEAR DA WISDOM WORD.
     
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    Jyntlbreez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yep...sad, but true...often we see on the news and read in the papers about mother's who turn to these hasty antics as a solution to their drug habits, fears of motherhood and simply the ability to cope as a mother. My heart , prayers and hand, goes out to those in the dilemma....Great scribe..intense
     
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    this read is reality in too many places, nice write
     
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    She looks at her child
    The baby wakes up and her eyes meet
    Mother cracks a painful smile
    Mother wishes she never awoke from her sleep
    Cause she senses her child senses the sin she is about to commit

    like that

    real piece right here

    nice job
     
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    I want to say something prolific
    'bout that but that only thing that came up for me was

    I can smell the inside of the garbare
    it's a smell I am used to so I go to sleep in the
    gut wrenching smell I am used too

    I can't cry cause she stop crying
    she never knew love to give love so she tried and throw-up love
    he was a dime piece in her remix of glove mix...
    pimped out pinky nail for the line she wanted to do and could not afford
    did go get wic cause she thought it to be wack
    so she got caught on smack

    When I look back I guess I served some type of purpose
    for she stayed clean for nine months that longest in her life
    there is a heart in there

    too bad it is cover in black smoke...
    I cried and she cried and I stoped crying
    as I lay in the thing that is the most comftable for me

    no pretty baby smell, it;s like mother womb so deep and dark , now I can lay my soul to rest, and her's too

    ( if that over stepping I apologize, if not that is what I felt.)
     
  8. Twofish

    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a powerful piece - not all poetry can be about love and fantasy...as hard as it is to read, REALITY is the most important use for POETRY, so flow on scribe...and welcome to tha party :)

    1:heart:
    Unity Strength Hope Determination Freedom
     
  9. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    powerful

    scribe. felt the vibe here. sad but true and it happens often than you think or what they put on the news.



    One
     
  10. PloeMorphic

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    deep

    that was tight. there is alot of truth to that. keep it up. Peace
     
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