Black Poetry : She took the love away.....

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  1. Archival

    Archival Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and so came the end of our relations
    throwing my heart into palipitations
    she stood with a smile in her beauty and elegance
    it seems so peculiar considering the circumstance
    there was something she wanted to say
    she took the love away
    and her eyes shined such a beautiful hue
    filling with drops of silver and blue
    her voice raised up into sounds of a melody
    as she explained her infidelity
    after four years together this would be the day
    she took the love away
    and I admired the way she was wonderfully bold
    while being so very heartbreakingly cold
    in asking me to let this slide
    and for a brief moment I actually tried
    after all it was me that had forced her to stray
    she took the love away
    because she was given everything she desired
    her wisdom and love was all I required
    maybe I treated her too amazingly well
    it must have been a real living hell
    being loved unconditionally every day
    she took the love away
    she used me and walked all over my soul
    leaving me more empty then whole
    and so I inquire of my raw emotion
    why force me to suffer this cruel devotion
    what possible reason do I have to stay
    she took the love away

    and things can never be the same

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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u said it wit the depth of passion and the wisdom of knowing...tyte
     
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    Archival Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You know....

    Rich, seems no matter how long I'm gone your always here to digg into some prose. Not sure what destee's would be without it. Or afronet before it for that matter.

    Thanks.

    Infrequently Soulful,
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Wow.....such a great write....i love the rhyme scheme and the jovial rhythm this piece has....
    a great write....with true emotions....you told it just as it is
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    big ups just doing my part .........
     
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    D*** brother I could feel your emotions it was like reading your heart and soul...great write!
     
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    Archival Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks choc, appreciate the emotional understanding.

    Infrequently Soulful,
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    No Words

    There are no words to describe the way your poem made me felt. I love it....brilliantly stated brotha, beautiful.
     
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    ...

    Some things are best felt rather then said.

    Respect poet,

    Infrequently Soulful,
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    ahhhhhhh man i was totally feeling this poet flo on.:terrific:
     
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