Black Poetry : she needed my friend...

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  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    l learned that lovers' words
    are not always what she needs to hear
    my words like "baby " "queen" and "dear" were my everyday diction
    in her ear...

    l know we have our affairs our issues that we handle well
    but there were some things that she personally would deal with
    and here mannerisms allowed me to tell..

    so, just for a minute, a second, an hour and maybe days
    l stopped with those endearing names and called her by her first name and told her l'm here when she's ready to talk...
    no l didn't beg her to tell me what's wrong
    l didn't grab her hand
    l didn't rub her hair with the usual affection
    l just wanted to know what me, her friend from the start,
    could do to help her heart and so l waited patiently
    as l normally would not

    she began telling me how she felt, how she was feeling about life and life's vicissitudes which sometimes eat our wills..
    l watched her tears fall w/o wiping them away
    l gave her the space, the hug without embrace...
    had she needed more,
    l would have left her alone with God within the door..

    l felt...

    l felt a breeze through the open window
    speaking peace to me
    and to her and to us and it felt refreshing as if
    to remind us of our foundation on which our love was built..
    so l would pray for me
    for her b/c sometimes...
    just being me is her quilt....
    and so it is that the seas must part at God's will so that when together again
    it will be confirmed serenity and peace upon love
    ... and so it was

    she did not need my lover
    my giver of things
    my king
    she needed my friend
    and l, her lover
    her giver of things
    her king
    was there.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes brutha say it all
    this here was the perfect flow
     
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    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...:)

    she is blessed
    to have thee
    she is blessed
    to have a king
    a lover
    a man so tru
    some1 wise enough to jus let her be blue
    and as the tears dry their tracks
    she is blessed u have her back :)
     
  4. angelicsage

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    WOW! J'hiah, there is a beauty within you that is displayed in the way you frame this poetic masterpiece. Only someone with that type of empathic insight to a woman's heart could write a piece like this. wow...

    Beautiful Scribe!:spinstar:

    Peace,
    Angeli
     
  5. Alizentang

    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ok....You blew me away with this here. She, whoever she may be is indeed a lucky, lucky woman. She better hold on to you.

    THIS WAS A MASTERPIECE!
     
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    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey j'hiah,

    Great flow!! This is a very well written piece!! I feel you!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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    dude...
    man, i don't even know what to say...
    like rich said
    this is a perfect flow
    word...
    da friend is da glue
    so very true
    peace
    khasm
     
  8. Soullyricist

    Soullyricist Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This here is **** beutiful!! Much felt. I enjoyed this most def! Well done Poet...well done
     
  9. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $R,
    my fellow-escort, thanx.

    triniti424,
    only you have flattered me :D
    thanx..

    angelic,
    thanx. l await the angelic/jh connection :wink:

    Alizentang,
    girl you're crazee but you're right :D

    Sierra,
    l feel you too queen..
    thanx.

    Khasm,
    the metamorphic poet,
    with your words l must've done something right.'
    thanx dun

    Soullyricist,
    thanx much. glad you feel it...

    this fam is tyte!!!

    nfinite,,
    jh.
     
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    hey j'hiah
    this is so
    beautiful
    loving this
    feeling
    wonderful special
    Peace
     
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