Black Poetry : She makes me weak

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am patient.
    I got that from going fishing.
    Its been a few weeks now.

    Today I’m going to see her.
    I can’t wait.
    I’m so excited.

    When I walk thru the door.
    She will stop on the floor.
    What she is doing and look at me.
    I will glow.

    The whole room will also know she is on my side.
    I will stroll across the room with the pride of man.
    She will meet me before I reach my seat.
    She will look at me as if I’m her man.
    I’m not.

    Still we know if there was a chance
    we would go full motion.
    I could love a girl like this :hearts2:
    it's a hearts ocean.

    I’ll look at the bar maid and
    call out my favorite.
    Long Island Tea she will fix. :toast:

    She pours some extra rum in that thing
    because the air in the room is now thick.

    I stick out my hand.
    The girl takes it and holds.
    For a moment time will come to stand still. :time:

    I have to release and turn back on time.
    To get all others to cease.
    That look they gave. :cool:
    The stares and :gossip: we made.
    When we greet each other this week.

    I’ll tell her I can’t stay long.
    I’m in for a drink.
    She delivers it with water for herself.
    She will take a moment to sit down
    and talk because she likes sharing herself.
    She is deep.

    I love it I don’t get that much.
    I tend to gravitate to depth.
    We laugh as we talk, we sharing
    some thoughts things that men of
    nations call wealth.

    I’ll get up to go.
    I told her so.

    I’ll see you maybe next week.
    She knows I’ll be back.
    To have my mind attacked :uzi:
    by that lady that makes me weak. :heart:
     
  2. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Umm attraction can be so sweet.
    Nice flow on
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice drop brotha
    I know that feeling all to well!! :rolling:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You painted such a comfortable scene with that poet's brush. Some people we just simply find an ease in, just something about them. Your pen is on fire I see poet!
     
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    ...resistance to passion is
    often pointless...lol
    we are all weakened to
    the drawing...
    particulary when there
    is intrigue and mystery
    of the unknown brewing...

    love the suspense in this flow...
    Great story line!
    Much love,
    Sage
     
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    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like I like :terrific: :terrific: :terrific: :smokin:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man i know this so well we all fold at some point
    this was tyteeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!
     
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    my goodness Hodee
    this is a awesome flow
    wonderful piece
    you do indeed flow in many forms:)

    Peace~N~Love
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what a nice vision it took me in very well posed
    Peace
    Angel
     
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