Black Poetry : she knows...

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  1. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "i love you, i want you here with me"
    heard a faint whisper
    whats wrong with my ears
    having a hard time hearing
    its dark
    i forgot to wake up
    but my eyes are open
    this searing pain in my chest
    tells only part of the story
    why can't i move?
    is this a dream?
    turning my head is an effort
    blurry vision straining to focus
    its my lady
    cying
    i'm not dreaming
    what the hell is going on?
    oooo, the pain is so intense
    i feel agony from lips to fingertips
    i stare at her stare
    what is happening here?
    through the door behind her
    a second figure appears
    i faintly hear a muffled voice
    raising my head i see two women
    its her...
    "i loved you, how could you do this to me"
    is what she had said
    my head slams back into the pillow
    she knows
    i scream from paralyzed lips
    her tears falling like rain
    as she pushes the knife deeper...
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed u scribe a picture here in my mind .....got me wondering
     
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    deepgrrl Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Derrick!! This poem gives me chills. It's like film noir in verse! Mysterious! I LIKE it!!
     
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    ****...
    where is your mind these days!
    i love this twist...
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Derrick Jay, Ihave missed your scribes so much...Powerful delivery, you phucked up that time bruh..
    E
     
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    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ummhmmm, I'd say she knows...

    tightly done

    Bert
     
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