Black Poetry : she knew nothing

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she knew nothing except the shadows
    that constantly consumed her thoughts
    killing her....
    killing her....
    killing her....

    she knew nothing
    but the shattered pieces
    of reality at her feet,

    that he broke with rough hands,
    and her broken heart,
    that lay at her feet,
    that he stomped on,


    she knew nothing except
    her bloodshot black eyes
    percieved destuction,
    and her broken teeth
    gnawed on death

    the walls bleed around her
    as she screamed,
    "PLEASE STOP"
    "PLEASE STOP"
    "PLEASE STOP"

    "NO MORE"
    "NO MORE"
    "NO MORE"

    as he struck her
    with his fist and feet
    she knew nothing but pain...
    :(

    (c)
     
  2. MORE

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    APPLAUSE APPLAUSE, I ALWAYS CAN COUNT ON SOMFIN GREAT FROM U!:jumping: :jumping: :jumping:
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u sister, u likewise, love and peace MORE god bless u!
    much love,
    -story
     
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    hi the_story
    i am feeling so much
    from your scribe
    you are so deep
    as you flow
    the release
    much love
    Peace
     
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    [email protected]..dats some anguish...
    vivid piece
    i can almost see that room
    peace
    khasm
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hi blu: i'm glad ya liked my flow, its a tragic, whats going on today in the world, we only have our faith to hold onto in this world

    khasm13: thank u, she was in deep anguish, this is how situations like this are usually tragic.:(
     
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    this was captivating story, shedding light on a very serious issue here...well scribed
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sadly, that's a reality for too many people....you expressed it so well.
     
  9. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank yall for feelin me on this poem and yes it is a tragic issue that needs to be brought to lite.
     
  10. Jazz4u

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    pieces like this remind me of my childhood
    and it's sad that these are people's memories
    my memories
    j.
     
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