Black Poetry : She dosent know

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  1. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i wrote this in my history lecture class today, there is this girl who sits like two rows down from me and everyday i see her she looks like she has just finished crying. i want to go up and talk to her but i just feel like its not a good time. well this is what i wrote.........




    she sits still in the silience of the day
    she feels all alone in ths world and
    always feels as if nothing is going right
    shes been searching for so long for
    someone to love and
    in her quest for knowledge has lost
    touch with the omniscent man above
    her thoughts these days are not of joy
    but of lost hopes, lost dreams and the
    pride that had been riped outside her
    eyes since the day she broke down
    and infront of everyone dropped her
    head and cried
    she feels like her life is over and wants
    so badly for it to come to an end
    i wish i could tell her how i feel
    and bring happiness into her life again
    she dosent know how much i love her
    she dosent know how much i care
    she dosent see the beauty inside herself
    i wish i could show her all thats there
     
  2. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    POWER-FULL!!!!

    ohhh how this moved me, poet! Enjoying reading your work.

    thank you

    a
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!! very emotional feelings here.......write on poet!
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poet,

    Very moving piece. Scribe On Poet!

    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
  5. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LP.


    i have to agree with those before me...
    this is a beautiful-ly touching piece. isn't
    it amazing sometimes what we see...
    just by watching the people&things around
    us??

    (i'm diggin' ya style!!)

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Simply a touching piece, this speaks volumes poet....

    :) N2
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey LP. check ya private messages! :)
     
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