Black Poetry : she cried.........

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  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she cried..
    for she became his bride/by the still waters he took her for a carriage ride
    nocturnes entertain as they listen...
    she saw the glisten of her star and her angel from afar
    as their lips softly collide..

    he cried..
    for she was his wisdom, his pride/
    he felt as if their 2 hearts were forever tied
    into a wellspring that never dried/she occupied his mind, his heart with a presence that could not be denied..

    i cried..
    never thought i'd let go of my pride
    though i tried/i was only happy for them, my friends by each other's side until one day...

    she cried..
    for in me
    there was always a place where she could confide/
    except for one place, one space left unoccupied/
    she said
    "i'm...i'm..i'm not satisfied...
    sexually...
    with my eyes wide, shocked, i sighed
    and often in my presence she'd abide, stammering, saying
    "your advice, i tried.."
    she left, sadly.
    i cried

    for in her
    was always a place i could confide/
    except for one place, one space left unoccupied/
    i said
    "i...i'm not satisfied..
    either"
    the doors of our hearts had opened wide/
    she cast herself in my arms as if she died,
    silently crying...
    i'm
    silently trying..
    we're
    silently dying in each other
    and one day

    he cried...
    "maybe i'm not giving her something on the inside."
    i sing
    write her poetry, i just bought her a diamond ring."
    often in my presence he would abide
    "man help me out, you have never lied."
    saddened
    hurt
    no longer could this hide/i know i'll regret this day i replied..


    j'hiah
    nfinite
    from his serene garden

    copyright, written on the leaf from the serene garden
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    WHAT CAN A MAN DO!?

    JH DES WAS REAL COZ I FELT IT
    DEEP WITHIN
    DES PIECE IS ! ((((SHAKING MY HEAD)))
    SPEACHLESS~~
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    j'hiah,

    This piece is well worth crying over. Good scribe poet!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    STANDIND OVATION!!!!!

    jh...

    ahhhh yessss!! this is tyght for sho!
    fantastic imagery... spectacular scribe!
    i lovedid it... umm hmmm... dats ryght! ;)

    InfiniteLove...
    Sunshyne~
     
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    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!

    Real life...hit em' hard poetry...I love it!

    this is real and deeply felt!

    Afri
     
  6. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    here's some tissue

    pure imagination y'know...
    though in some cases that's real life...
    a lil sumn' to grace you with, that's all..

    *awaitin' poetic delight's queen presence..*
    thanx peeps

    j'hiah
    prayin'
    in his serene garden...
     
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    Yes.........I agree. This was very beautiful...deeply felt..

    8th
     
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    jh

    a dilema for sure, reminded me a little of Best Man, the movie. This types of thing could wear a brother out..wouldn't want to be caught in anything like this.
    This is straight up.

    JAH Lives.
     
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    I can understand why she cries..
    You seem to bring that out in a woman.
    She's blue because of you....
     
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    **** J'

    You dropped a masterpeice from concept to creation!
    perfect in flow & arrangement and the content is top notch!

    Keep Droppin em' like dis dog!

    Too Tight!
    Reas
     
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