Black Poetry : She can't shut up, can she

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  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Waters plunge
    Like waves.
    Articulate words,
    Heavy and bold, underline her.
    Mindful show off,
    You ignite my feelings.


    These walls seem to shrink
    I need you like subject and predicate,
    Life and death,
    Like the horizontal line
    Crossing the “l” we need you.
    Yet, somehow, you sicken me.
    Please arouse someone else
    With your adolescent pen strokes,
    They don’t move me.
    Sing your deceitful lullaby
    Alone,
    Show off.


    Feelings don’t bother you,
    I can tell.
    Her mouth has been leaking
    How about you seal it tight.
    I will go now,
    The tunes are breaking
    Vases, quickly,
    Unfasten her lips
    They seem to have overthrown her
    So let it be.
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    For what has caused words to leak so eloquently, we are thankful. Such a work of art, scribe.
     
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    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great piece! I loved your word choice! Keep it coming!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome write poet
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    sometimes

    NO!
     
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