Black Poetry : SHE BROUGHT ME TO ELLIPSIS ...

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  1. garlicsalt99

    garlicsalt99 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SHE BROUGHT ME TO ELLIPSIS ...

    She started at a period, with a certain repulsion abatement
    She had the quality of timeless beauty that on its own, made a statement
    With an occular attraction tied to a living, breathing, walking display
    And at times I want to stop staring but I just can't look away
    Her features were striking, feminine and delicate
    With a mix of virtue and beauty that goes together like a subject and a predicate
    Predicated on virtuous tendencies with a good nature no one doubt
    Which makes her truly beautiful, both inside and out

    She took it to a level of exclamation that far exceeded mere snickerings and chuckles
    She had me saying "Oh my God!" ... and had me biting my knuckles
    I was stuck on stupid momentarily, verily pinned to alter who's adjoint
    Because the stare she gave me was punctuated with an exclamation point
    My heart raced a little bit as we conversed with intentional glances
    Moving closer toward each other taking conventional chances
    Chances that turn to certainty, certainly leading to where relations spark
    Moving to places where periods are replaced by exclamation marks

    We ended up in a place of interrogation that was potentially provocative
    A place without shame, where the statements were interrogative
    Peppered with question marks, we danced around curiosities that were the same
    And this tango of sorts started with the asking of her name
    She told me hers -- with a measured flirtation -- then I told her mine
    We went on to ask questions of each other, with curiosities aligned
    And it all combined to make for bouts of conversation and confessions
    Making for a very interesting question and answer session

    We took to separating words and independent clauses with precious moment s that were stolen
    Lacing our words with commas, colon and semi-colons
    Emboldened with a familiarity that comes with the passing of time
    We talked; we shared; we flirted -- spending the moments contributing to this rhyme
    She was indeed A Visual Confection: Sugar to the Eye
    I told her my favorite colors: black, forest--green and blue, the color of the skies
    It was a moment un-negated by the loss of intrigue
    However, it was punctuated with a thought that she was out of my league

    She brought me to ellipsis ... just because
    There was a moment when all I could do was pause
    At a loss for words time and again as breaks in the conversation would reveal
    And once resumed I confessed to her that her beauty was surreal
    The palm of her hand rested on the back of mine, not meant as a grand gesture
    But it was meant to convey in its touch ... a conjecture
    An unsaid statement that spoke louder than the words of inlaid debts
    Echoed by the words from her lips as she said "I'm as real as it gets"

    She brought me to ellipsis ... more often than not
    A place where the written words of this rhyme is replied with dot dot dot
    Etcetera Etcetera ... so forth and so on
    My shyness was tugging at me to stop, but she encouraged me to go on
    She found me as intriguing as I found her, which was a point that wasn't moot
    My shyness and inhibition ... she found it kind of cute
    And at it's root she saw a sincerity that was genuine, to its core
    No ulterior motives, no hidden hands, nothing hidden behind closed doors

    She had me looking crazy ... because she brought me to ellipsis
    With a beauty so stunning ... and a confidence, sure and shiftless
    I was brought to a pause not because of outward aesthetic concessions
    But because of a revelation brought about by an honest confession
    From her mouth to my ear,like the accents of glass and bevel
    She confessed to not being worthy of me because she wasn't on my level
    And I had to reassure her that any level that I've attained
    She would be the perfect accent to my standards ... a highlight to what I've gained

    She brought me to ellipsis ... I say this without placing blame
    She brought me to a pause when she told me I brought her to the same
    And there was a moment of silence ... though no one died
    We spoke with our eyes for a moment with eyes open wide
    Awe struck and dumbfounded ... yet so high on glee, it was meteoric
    Awe Shucks ... I felt like a school boy I was feeling so euphoric
    She brought me out of my shell in a manner that left no one listless
    And she brought me to a punctuation ... and left me at ellipsis

    Written by: K. Charles
    (c) 2011
     
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    Quite lovely, and very well done.
     
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    Proverbs31Woman Be kinder than necessary! MEMBER

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    Garlicsalt99, wow, I love the journey of this poem, thank you for taking us on the scenic route!
     
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    bruh ya pen is heat !!!!!!!
     
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    You turned the period into an eclipse with this work. The piece represents the function of a period in every way. How she made you pause how she brought you to a level of excitement with exclamation and then a sudden end. But as we know endings are always new beginnings! Well written...!
     
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    I'm brought to ellipsis by all of your replies ... thank you all for reading :)
     
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