Black Poetry : Shattered dreams become a cluttered closet of fragile secrets closed behind doors.

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  1. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Shattered dreams become a cluttered closet of fragile secrets closed behind doors.

    Bitter thoughts sealed by zipped lips,
    No sunken ships from whispers Issshhh.

    Skeletons in the closet, Rumors flooding the street
    He says, She says with passed codes of unknown beef.

    He slept with her
    She slept with him
    She slept with her
    He slept with him

    He has AIDS
    She is tricking for pay

    She don't know who's the daddy
    He doesn’t care for his children sadly.
    They selling rocks and carrying glocks
    Cops got the blocks hot but sales don't stop

    Junkies cop rocks
    Killers cop Glocks
    In this school of hard knocks
    Cop's cop payoff drops.

    Cops are pigs
    Blacks do Bid's
    It's a secret society
    In the Ghetto's Diary

    Schools stay closing
    Education get's frozen
    But Don't Front.....
    The Jails Stay Open!!

    Elders Disrespected, Gangs get Respected
    Ish done got worse since Grandmaster dropped "The Message"
    See....
    Mommas raise a lady
    Lady has a baby
    Baby birthed a baby
    Baby starts the cycle over again it's crazy!

    Shattered dreams become a cluttered closet of fragile secrets closed behind doors
    Another soul lost with no map of sin
    O.D. on aspirin so a miscarriage will happen
    So she decided to cut her wrist and bleed
    Carrying his seed
    Degraded
    Impregnated
    15yrs old and dreams are tattered
    Body battered
    Trust shattered
    Mind Scattered
    A 9year old believes every man's the same
    Innocence stolen and thinking she's to blame
    Image being defiled and violated at 3!
    She is even willing to sell her own children to supply his dark greed
    Momma acts blind to the vile acts and deeds
    So he molested his three stepdaughters ages 3, 9 and 15
    Step dad has problems with older women his age you know what I mean?

    Closet Confessions, Family Secrets, and Sin sessions.
    Physically Bruised, Mentally Used, Nothing To Loose
    You haven’t seen Jack until you walked these shoes.

    when..........

    Shattered dreams become a cluttered closet of fragile secrets closed behind doors.​

    Caramelpython
    Jagged-Python Productions Inc
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayum :jawdrop: this was so off the hook..you bringing it...

    DA SNAKE DIN DID IT AGAIN

    straight fire :hot:

    this was a hmmmm well shoot aint no words for it but it was ya know

    Peace
    Angel

    ps....this the CP I know..JAGGED STYLE
     
  3. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Going back to my old style 4 awhile but Im still Extreme :smokin:
    Thanks angel 4 the love up in here. :love:
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    you know that line is tight:
    "shattered dreams become a cluttered closet of fragile secrets closed behind doors.."
    well posed...and the end stanza:
    "closed confessions, family secrets and sin sessions
    physically bruised, mentally used nothing to lose
    you haven't seen jack until you walk in these shoe
    when......
    shattered dreams become a cluttered closed of fragile secrets closed
    behind doors"

    loved it...wrote it down again so i could keep it in my brain
    I like the way you set up the word "when" too...
    like that kind of musical change up in poetry....
    very, verrry nice
     
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    Whoa, unreal!!! This is captivating, cp. Wow.
     
  6. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's kind of profound how it came to me and the pen took me on a ride! Thanks alot for the love up in here! :wink:
     
  7. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    See what has happne was.................LOL :spin:

    Thanks alot my sister!
     
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    Wow, Brother Python

    This was a battle cry for our community. Deep piece. I love the changeup. Peace and blessings
     
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    your old style is on fiyah son....
    tyte piece no doubt....
    one love
    khasm
     
  10. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :roll: Thanks for the support Jazzy :)
    Now if I can get my mind to slow down so I can gather my poetic vibe together I will make sense of it all. LOL​
     
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