Black Poetry : shame on me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by toylin, Aug 12, 2004.

  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    once
    you told me you loved me
    had no reason
    to doubt those words
    said a change
    was due to come
    and like a fool i
    believed you
    went into your arms
    right into your kiss
    held on 'til you let me go
    let me fall
    thought about trying to cry
    maybe the tears would cleanse
    my soul
    caught you with her
    in my house in my bed
    said she's the one i led
    tried to put the blame on me
    hit on me
    put me under suspicion
    said you wouldn't put nothing
    past me
    shame on you
    twice
    you cried for me
    put the sparkle on my finger
    to keep it warm
    while you weren't there
    said a change was due
    and i believed you again
    like the fool that i am
    back into my heart you came
    calling my name
    promising
    no more
    would you play those games
    how can i let a man
    be a man
    without being less then
    the woman i am
    and there you were
    high off the rage
    smoldering there
    smoke in a clear sky
    never even told me why
    and as all my senses left me
    all i could think
    shame on me
     
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    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice drop...it captures all the pain of being betrayed by someone you really trusted...in this case a romantic partner.....very tight flow Toylin.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so tight..i feel ya on dis....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    expressing da emotions , releasing da myth of being.....
    feeling u on dis drop sistah
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel the pain here Toylin, I really do. Your words captured that feeling of heartbreak. Very emotive piece.
     
  6. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks everyone. I wasn't too sure about posting this one.... I thought it was too personal at best. But, here it is.. Maybe I'm braver than I think....
     
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    This is so heartfelt!!!!
    Love can make the meanest,
    coldest person do things they
    never thought they would do.

    So sweet Toylin its no shame
    on you at all!!! It's shame on
    him!!!!

    I too feel ya on this!!!!
    Incredible drop!!!!!!
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much for that response. They say guilt is a great motivator.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    true indeed it is sistah !!!
    u said it wit great pride and releasing da real
    flow on !
     
  10. Eric Mitchell

    Eric Mitchell Active Member MEMBER

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    I think our best work comes from our souls. This piece appears to be a part of your soul. Thank you for sharing.
     
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