Khasm13 : shallow waters...

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    i'm so and so
    i'm this i'm that
    but their all jus wic wic wack...

    poets wanna grab the page
    with multiple poems of love and rage
    and although this is sometimes cool
    it should'nt be all you use as a tool
    don't be a fool
    and let commonality reign over you and rule
    take the time
    to try and enhance someone elses mind
    cause this is where a poetic gift truely shines
    gather yourself to say something profound
    and instead of being a surface dweller
    dig deeper underground
    brain cells blossom when your thought process is sound
    plain jane poets remind me of bozo the clown
    pose'n
    expose'n
    mentals
    that are stuck on da fundamentals
    sorry, it's not in my nature to be gentle
    when written down words sound simple
    change your pace
    quicken up da tempo
    occasionally
    the reaction you'll get from flex'n different styles will surely
    amaze thee
    a broad range adds contrast
    with more colors to paint your poetry
    a diverse style will surely last
    i see poets kick'n the same ol same ol
    and that's why i pass
    throw'n the same poem with different titles in mass
    it's not quanity
    it's quality
    cause blaze'n the board with 6 or 7 wack poems
    really bothers me
    like winning a fake lottery
    or looking at broken pottery...
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word...........feel ya vibe
     
  3. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    thanks rich...
    i had to do this...
    peace
    khasm
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    enjoyed reading this....
     
  5. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa! Silky, tight flow with a great message. Flow on, bruthaman. :hot:
     
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    SOULDEEP3 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Khasm, your poem describes EXACTLY what I'm all about...DIVERSITY; VERSATILITY....UNIQUENESS.
     
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    (oooooooooh no u didn't boy):eek:

    :laugh:But you did, LOL..............I must say....I did love it
    you make a poet think, while I do love writing about love
    as we all do......versatility is key as you've heard me say so
    many times of why I read you...it's so funny, I was talking with a fellow
    poet today that feels they get no reads.......and I told him
    that everyone's not gonna feel you because he's, well "a lil deep"
    and you can't relate to a surface dweller...they don't wanna hear
    it...and won't take the time to absorb.......

    thank you for this, I see it's time to take it to the next level...
    I'll see you there :D
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...u did ur thang on this...
     
  9. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feelin you on this Khasm
    got to stay creative

    Peace
     
  10. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayyyyuuuummm.... I feel that. U really laid it down with this one my brutha... I just love ur technique and honesty. Tell it like it is! lol
     
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