Black Poetry : Sexual Marauder

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  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You came into my body...uninvited
    contaminating my heart/mind/soul
    with your ruthless invasion
    stealing from me, something precious
    which was not yours to take

    Telling me you liked it rough
    then punching me in the face
    cracking my cheekbone

    You told me you liked pain
    before you left the imprint
    of your teeth all over my breasts

    You told me you liked it "kinky"
    then showed me over and over
    just what "kinky" meant to you

    You told me you could "go" all night
    had enough stamina for ten guys
    as you abused my womanhood

    Spewing your diseased semen
    inside me, making my skin crawl
    minimising me, to a begging
    pleading mass of human flesh
    crying, asking you to stop the onslaught

    You laughed and continued to do
    disgusting, demoralising acts upon my body
    seeing how far you could push me
    how much I could suffer
    before my spirit died and the light
    went out in my eyes

    At the end of forever
    you groaned one last time
    pulling your foul-smelling flesh
    away from mine

    Before you left, you leant down
    and kissed me full on the mouth
    I vomited, violently, the taste
    of you, too foul to keep inside

    And I felt like a discarded doll
    amidst a rotting pile of trash
    broken, and nearly lifeless

    Hating YOU for raping me
    but thanking GOD
    that you left ME alive

    (c) nfn 2001
     
  2. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw this picture...

    Vividly... and it touched me in ways you could never understand. Thank you.. I truly enjoyed the read.. if you don't mind me asking.. what inspired this one.. for i could never write about such pain... Once I did.. and i never saw those writing again... It was going to be a book but anyways.. I'm babling.. I enjoyed the scribe though.. Excellently written!!!
     
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    oooh this brought

    the pain, sis! OUCH!!!!!!!!!!

    The images are making me stark, raving, maddd!!!!!

    Excellent Kitana Kitana!

    whew!

    a
     
  4. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    shaneak..thanks for the read and the comments...glad you enjoyed..I wrote this after seeing an interview on tv, with two 16 year old girls, who were gang-raped by 5 lebanese men. Each of the girls were made to wait and listen while the other was raped..
    It was very sad to listen to and made me feel deeply for them...

    a...subjects like this are always painful, but the sad truth is they are "there"..thank you for "feeling' this......
     
  5. poeticdelight

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    i tell you she's a professional...

    very traumatizing experience captured in this piece

    really deep


    pd
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    WOW!!

    sadly sad full of pain and anger
    my heart droped and my soul
    went cold ......sistah gurl u slap
    the truth out here and a ****
    shame what happen to those kids

    if u ever see these guys send them to me
    forth i'll sho them something
    a well *** spanking and take what little
    manhood they have away
    may their be peace in da valley .......:(
     
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    WOW!

    Kitana.......bring it on home...Gurl!

    You made me visualize it
    You made me feel it
    You made me experience it......

    Epiphany:heart:
     
  8. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    pd..thank you as always..and yes, it was hard to even listen to them re-telling their story..what made it worse was that it was a race-hate crime...

    Rich..thanks for your support as always..and I agree, it was a shame...5 hours of pain took away the rest of their lives...

    epiphany..thank you...I was hoping I could write it well enough to do just that..thanks for the read and the words...much appreciated..

    K
     
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    Whoooo!

    This one hurt! SO much reality here, so much fear and pain that I saw it all from the inside out to the outside in and I did not like the feeling--excellent piece--Ra

    :confused: Is Religion to blame for the WTC tradgedy? Stop past and read a different view of the World Trade Center Crisis--http://www.destee.com/forums/showthread.php?threadid=4105
     
  10. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cindy..thank you for your comments..and yes these things are painful but they also need to be talked about, going there doesn't bring bad memories but it does make me feel deeper for someone who has suffered...thanks for the read..

    Amun-Ra...glad you connected with this piece, and no, the feelings are not good, but they are "too" real for some..thanks for the read...much appreciated...

    K
     
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