Black Poetry : Seventh Heaven

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Sep 30, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You and I
    Connected
    Moanin' for help
    like Jesus has ressurected
    Me all over your body
    like I'm overly protective
    Searching for spots to please you
    like Im a private eye detective

    We change positions
    as often as we blink
    Our chemistry flows like rivers
    as our bodies are so in sync
    Hot and erotic
    Sweat dripping as we drink
    The warmth of your body
    reminds me of the fur of mink

    Your milk chocolate skin
    pressing against mine
    Musuems would pay to buy
    a sculpture of our bodies intertwined
    Everytime our lips connect
    it feels like the 1st time
    I can see rainbows and mountains
    But Im too deep in you to climb

    Your nails dig into my back
    like it feels too good to hurt
    Making faces, there are no spaces
    And all I can do is smirk
    I'm in between your legs
    ridin waves of pleasure while we surf
    I give you more, you try to fight
    But can only seem to jerk

    I'm addicted to you
    like your my drug
    We're flyin' aimlessly
    like a released dove
    Went from room to room
    couch to rug
    To think it all started
    from one kiss and one hug
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow poet, enjoy your ride to seventh heaven
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...If I had to pick a few lines that made me awestruck, they would be...
    "Moanin' for help
    like Jesus has ressurected
    Me all over your body"
    But really as a whole, this piece simply hit the bullseye on how it is when all is right between 2 loves. Warmly written poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tis was awesome and tyteeeeeeee!
    took me in awe and speechless
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOA!!!!
    Good lawd, this is hot. So are you, poet - you be blazin up the page right hurr. I really really dig this one. What a ride.

    :1on1:
     
  6. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall

    I was in study hall a lil bored, so i just decided to write this off the top of my head. i appreciate the love.
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was off the top of your head??? very sensual write girl. Keep on doing your thing
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks swtT

    much love n much respect...
     
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    nice flow. good use of eroticism and cuteness. i am curious to read something that u have on love....good write
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mmmmm sista you so smooth smh i gotta step back like "worrrd say what" lol Its just good to have you back roun these parts :)
     
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