Black Poetry : Setting in...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Sep 20, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nothing deep....just a present feeling


    I sit down idle,
    Feeling motionless,
    Staring in space,
    Seeking for a time,
    And place in my life,
    Where one possibility would,
    Prove to be possible.

    Ok there’s you,
    And the fact that,
    I stood directly facing you,
    With hope pacing,
    To and fro in my heart,
    Wanting my interest,
    To become a part of your life also.
    And as time progressed,
    My needs grew,
    But apparently my void,
    Had even grown too big for you.


    Ok then there’s my job,
    And the fact that there is none.
    The fact that no one seems,
    To have the vacancy,
    And that I’m stuck with a degree
    Is making me,
    Want to give it up.
    But as I look at the successes in life,
    Walk upright and living it up,
    I’m inspired to lift my spirits,
    A bit higher.

    Then there’s…...
    Can’t really reflect anymore,
    Because I’m starting to detect,
    The venom seeping through my veins,
    About ready to burst through my pores.
    From the bite of reality.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime we vent into a shadow of doubt to see reality
    this was a very nice flow here continue on scribing !
     
  3. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks RiCH.......sometimes I tend to get stuck in the rut of letting life's obstacles get the best of me and overshadow me. But the effect of the 'venom' don't seem to last too long.... :eek:
     
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    Venting is a good and healthy release. Better to vent than to :bazooka: somones head off when it builds too high! :flame:
    I enjoyed your drop!!!
     
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    Sometimes when we start thinking of things that aren't going right, the wheels start turning so fast, that all we can see are all the negatives. And that is just to much for our minds to handle. Venting is great, then you can slow the pace down in your mind. I feel ya here, I really do poet.
     
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    it seems as though you were able to release some deep feelings there. felt good to get that off you chest i bet. great job
     
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    THA HOOKUPMAN Banned MEMBER

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    Chastity
    ...im clapping and lighting a match on this one.....this one is lava...hot :smokin: hookup....
     
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