Black Poetry : Set On Simmer

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Set on simmer
    The love still burns
    as the heart throb
    constantly yearns
    The flame has been
    on high for so long,
    couldn't even think straight,
    singing your song
    Fire burned so intensely
    the vessel almost burst
    hoping upon hope, that
    I wouldn't encounter the worst.
    Set on simmer
    Love's peak had to
    be eased
    As the clock ticks, waiting
    for the moment to be seized.
    The feelings of love
    still remain
    But the intensity of
    that heat was causing pain.
    Eternal love has ebbs and tides,
    it doesn't disappear out of the blue.
    Love just had to catch its breath
    It remains steadfast and true.
    It's just...
    Set on simmer,
    just look for that glimmer,
    love's eternal flame burning
    deep within you.
     
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    Oh, this is lovely! Love is so intense sometimes.. I wish I had a control switch for love when I really needed it. Very creative.
     
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    Thank you toylin. Your replies let me know how my words affected you, and I appreciate that.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome write sistah i like dis a lot flow on gurl!!!!!
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    well the title pulled me right in watz...
    such a strong statement for the imagination
    which you painted very nicely...
     
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    very strong imagination
    good write i enjoyed this one...

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Glad you liked this Rich, thank you brotha poet.
    Well, with that title, I guess it appeared to be steamy. My imagination is sort of out there...thank you deepy.
    Yes the imagination works wonders with imagery, thank you mzblkangel.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    watz...i hadn't gone to the "lower triangle" with the title
    the title evokes both the upper and lower...so laden with shades
    one can go anywhere....that's why I liked it...the totality of the title
    allowing imagination to soar...
    sometimes it takes so long to find the title...which will invite someone in..
    to me you did that well..
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The "lower triangle"? OK deepy, lol, I gotcha. I didn't realize that you got so much out of that title....wow. Which got me to thinking...with this piece, I thought of the title before I created the poem.
     
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    This is a sexy poem, sister. :hot: You have so much talent.
     
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