Black Poetry : Seriously

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HODEE, Jan 21, 2007.

  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You speaking your mind don’t upset me
    It’s the lack of communication
    That irritates me

    I get information out of you when you argue and disagree
    You seem to think this is some form of communication

    It is not

    It's twisted accusations is all I hear

    Where was this communication
    Surrounding all the good I have done

    Good job baby, some I love you's
    just hold me in your arms.

    I get all the blame of how unhappy you are
    I tell you I will leave
    I don't want to be apart of that scare
    Where are the loving quit times
    Hold me times
    Kissing me time I need
    Give me some of those sharing moments I desire from you

    Yet you feel I should know what you want and I should accept what you do
    If you communicated better
    Then those two things would be true
    I am intuitive enough to read between lines
    I can go with the flow if you consider me sometimes
    But when you continue every day it seems to take me for granted
    My reaction I should better control them is what you get it’s not anger.

    If you’re talking with your child and they don’t seem to listen
    Does that anger you or are you simply disappointed?

    I give this example because it is what I know happens.
    In any relationship when you aren’t heard it’s disappointment.

    I’m, not mad.

    I’ll tell you why it all really counts
    I have trusted you with my heart and it matters.
    I feel and I have asked you to change some of your ways
    Your reply “You can’t teach old dogs new tricks “is a joke and it’s sad.
    You even have said “I’m not going to change “
    So when I walk away, why are you calling my name?
    Is it to persuade me to give you another chance?
    Every time I do it’s the same circumstance.

    In the winds I feel change your not in the plans.
    I have told you I am asking you again
    Do you want this relationship to last?
     
  2. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I want it to last
    I dont want to see you as being my past

    I must let you know that I haven't been myself
    I felt

    That time away will bring us closer
    Please baby don't lose focus

    I need you to know that my heart aches for you
    I need you

    To take my heartfelt plea

    Seriously!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome scribing HODEE man ya pen talking sweet
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aw this is nice but very close to effective writing but i really feel this is coming from the heart right here which reflects on a flaky relationship how close am I on this
     
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