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  1. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    confusion to think
    confusin to think
    normally
    perform everyday
    actions functions
    what's wrong with me
    i feel heat when there is no warmth
    or fire
    i feel too weak
    to recognize or serve simple desire
    no place to rest
    so quickly before breakfast
    i tire
    i'm cut up into pieces
    mismatched
    i'm a kaleidescope of color
    mooshed into the back
    of the sock drawer
    not to be looked over
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa, I'm really liking this creative piece, keep workin that pen.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what a masterpiece scribe here lovin it
     
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    very nice
    likes this
     
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    Now THIS is just phenomenal. Understatement in places reflects massive depth. Please, flow on.
     
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    :)

    yes...very creative....luvin it :)
     
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    Brotha Antar,

    This one took my breath away: "I'm a kaleidescope of color / mooshed into the back / of the sock drawer / not to be looked over."

    Brilliant man.
     
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    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh yeah
    I'm loving your style
    The depth here is just right!
    I like layered poetyr like this
    I'm loving it
    Keep it coming!!!!!!!1


    PEACE AND LOVE
    twision
     
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