Quiet Poetry Lounge : Separation

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Kori, Aug 25, 2004.

  1. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Though my love for you is far from gone,
    Our romantic unity is over.
    I've been hurt countless times,
    But I can't release my daydreams of you
    The way you laugh
    As a breeze through my hair
    ...refreshing
    A glimpse of our smile still brightens my day...
    Though, now, that smile is warranted by another
    Someone obviously more worthy than I.
    I still hear your voice, infrequently bringing my joy.
    But, at comprehension, I am sickened by your words.
    We must only be friends!?
    I must listen to the words of your lips,
    But never kiss them?
    Stare in the awe at the satin of your skin,
    But never caress?
    How could you be so cruely loving?
    Allowing me to love you and denying me simultaneously.
    Forbidding me to swim,
    When, in love, I am so deep.
    You're trying hard to kill my soul
    ...and you're so close to succeeding.
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Close, but not there yet, you have time to save your own soul from the h&ll it's going through...but only you can do it.
    Nice script, I enjoyed reading it and thanks for allowing us in your heart.
     
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    I enjoyed this flow, Kori. Whenever we're told something that we don't want to hear it is just like our spirit breaks over and over. You will make it through.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    here with me yet not here
    this was a nice scribe i felt all of dis .
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Heart wrenching separation, so distant from the heart. Well written piece.
     
  6. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for replying. Im glad somebody can relate to my sentiments.
    Jazzymoonchild------->That is exactly how I feel. I know that soemday I'll get over it, but write now, I'll just use it to write. :/
     
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    When I read this piece, a song came to mind.
    You know that song that goes, "It takes a fool
    to learn that love dont love nobody?"

    I been that fool before. When
    love snatches you up by the collar,
    it's so hard to shake free!!!!!

    Heartfelt write!!!!!!
    Loved it!
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aww, Kori.. have you been reading my mind? You stole my thoughts and scripted them beautifully. Thanks for sharing.
     
  9. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    kori...
    felt your emotions..
    i felt the pain
    know that what is given will be returned...
     
  10. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LMAO...I been singing that **** song since JULY. hahahaha My friends think Im crazy, they just dont understand.

    toylin, maybe we'll write about it together sometime? ;)

    Deepy thank you. That made me feel all special and good :D
     
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