Black Poetry : sentenced to death

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  1. lovealexandria

    lovealexandria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mementomori: A reminder of death or morality

    Sentenced to Death
    Up In the mountain of *memento mori
    Staring down at the sea
    In its stillness, its emptiness.
    Every creature perching, staying, waiting.
    Waiting for the creature to sound its plea.
    A plea for memento mori to set it free.
    Free from its cage of depression,
    of sorrow,
    of torture of guilt.
    To shed its blood of insanity,
    to shred its voice of the profanities
    echoing in its heart.
    Destroying its dreams it has worked to embark,
    but failed.
    Because it can’t comprehend
    why it killed the girl in its hands.
    Dieing to be free.
    To be the soul it was meant to be.
    For life to be given to this sapless being.
    And in being free
    In the institution that let minds be.
    Strapped down securely by these bands,
    water trickling down its chin and,
    electricity pushing through its hands.
    The volts flowing like water
    Easily and smoothly.
    Filling its body with pain at haste.
    A mask covering the guilt in its face.
    It imagined its hands around her throat.
    Clutching the neck of the girl on the boat
    Its only daughter it left her to float
    After it killed her, it slit her throat.
    This monster! They shouted,
    as it sat there in pain.
    Clutching the chair, holding itself to blame.
    Great expectations it had for the girl.
    Before she had cancer
    that made its heart curl.
    its life it could not endure as long as this disease purloined its heart.
    it could not see her future torn apart.
    In its mind he had no choice
    but to end her misery, that it thought she felt.
    But what it thought now
    was that its brain could melt.
    it would be with its daughter now
    because of its disease.
    The one in its mind
    that wouldn’t let it be.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    another awesome write ...wow you pen flowing whewwwwww
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    wow

    they say the good die young

    a life cut short is not an easy thing to bear

    life goes on somehow just

    with a piece of it chipped away

    but with pain and torment 'til the end

    leaves us asking why?

    peace poet
     
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    Deep
    This flow holds the reader
    Great write poet.


    "Great expectations it had for the girl.
    In its mind he had no choice
    But to end her misery, that it thought she felt.
    But what it thought now
    It would be with its daughter now"
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We question death, we ask why a person had to die, and the answer that truly satisfies us, may never come. Agreeing with Hodee, this piece captures the reader's attention.
     
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    all i can say is...

    mmmmhhhhh
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this one grabbed at me...

    ...as i tried to understand the incomprehensible. NICELY DONE.
     
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    whoa.
    what a tale of turmoil and conflict
    at first I was thinking "HOW HORRIBLE!"
    but then the cancer
    and the high hopes crushed because of the cancer
    and then - whew smh
    it was tornado of emotion thats for sure
    maybe it makes me a dark individual but...
    I can relate to the anger towards a cancer that ruins the life of someone you love
    and the helplessness of not being able to do anything about that
    *sigh*
    I enjoyed it sister :)
    props poetess props :read:
     
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