Black Poetry : senses

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  1. deepy

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    ‘SENSES”

    Music voices ..sweet..envelop my ears
    Back bacon smells shoot up my nose
    AA Kenyan coffee wet my taste
    I hear the phone ringing and caressing sounds
    Senses
    my heart
    I see the candle flicker…flicker
    WE still don’t touch…





    c/ncn-deepy
     
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    not physically but mentally we embrace
    through every flicker awesome tyte drop
     
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    And I can envision this scene that you've painted with words deepy. I liked this warm piece, flow on poet.
     
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    Short yet heavy-hitting. Deepy, you always know how to do it up right. Much peace and love, sis.
     
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    the 6th sense

    i mentioned 5
    the smell, taste, touch,sight, hearing
    left out that 6th..the one i'm fearing
    the one i really know
    when bodyblood stops
    for a moment
    only that middle eye knows
    the next move
    who and what will
    be
    i see,hear feel,smell , touch
    that extra rush
    the 6
    inverted 9
    the voice of the DEVINE

    glad you responded the way you did...and i thank you
    it was not a warm poem as i wrote it watz or Rich your comment every flicker we embrace or gempis even as heavy hitting...
    you made me read it again...see other points of view in it...thank you for that...thank you...cause in the end i think yawl is right..
    the subconscious mind is a marvelous thing aint it...
     
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    using all 6 to move forward
     
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    Thank you for interpreting this, deepy. As I reread this I did not feel warmth in the final line, and perhaps that is what I missed the first time round. Flow on poet.
     
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