Black Poetry : seniltuo a wodahs

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by jahvandus, Apr 27, 2001.

  1. jahvandus

    jahvandus Active Member MEMBER

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    outline a shadow
    forever Eden vanishes
    dawn before titles
    etched in molasses
    copper angels named her
    dreamland Venus
    soul searching
    along side willow streams
    mirroring my destiny
    swiveled past life
    my yolk was she
    but now an interlude
    brown sugar anthems
    breathing cinnamon violets
    we
    ……………….she
    ……………………………….me
    creamed neo-song’s reality
    clipping her binds
    sublime mental new
    soul mate found
    stipulations concurred
    forever not now dawn
    an outline of her shadow
    with eucalyptus molds
    to fill inside lines
    gone now
    wishing I knew life
    with no pain
    but would I be mars
    without gravity


    Jahvandus Kwu
     
  2. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ouch...

    I'm sorry! Ask yourself this, would she be Venus without her Mars? Sometimes life is interupted to show you a different path in which to journey. Things change, birth, death, growth.

    I don't think your Venus meant to hurt you nor is she gone forever. You know this and you also know she will be there for you in every way imaginable. It's better to have than to have not. I know you are both stronger for it and she, if she hasn't read this knows your heart and felt this piece before it was even scribed.

    Jahvandus, we grow with life lessons learned and I wish we all knew life without pain and I wish that I could take yours away, but like you said would that be reality?

    One
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    O ~ MY !

    SO MUCH DEPTH
    SO TYGHT
    AND DAYUMM POET YA FLOW
    IS HITTING ME HARD
    GOTTA GO READ IT AGAIN!
    SAY IT ! SAY IT! SAY IT!!!
     
  4. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wowww, i'm feelin' all of this to the fullest, even the replies. thank you for this piece.

    ~~freeyomindasyouletitflo~~
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this

    is what I'm talking about jah! Except I could never express it this well!

    thank you!

    a
     
  6. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    woww!

    your poignant words paint clear pictures.
    this one's felt..
     
  7. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Daaaaayyyy - uuummm.....

    This be tight!!
     
  8. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ok I get it now jah. Thanks for the tip
     
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    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    in memory of ...

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  10. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice read....... soul mate found even if contradicted by lifes interruptions ..... you build on a solid ground because love is profound 2 it we r bound