Black Poetry : See Saw

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Amun-Ra, Mar 23, 2001.

  1. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw the look on your face
    when he walked past and smiled.
    I saw the secret flush glow your skin
    when his cologne drifted over our table.
    I saw your legs squeeze together
    the way the do when you're thrilled.
    I watched you go to powder your face
    and knew that you would be different
    whenever you left the ladies' room.
    I watched as you walked with
    a self-conscious but sexy swerve
    tipping lightly between tables
    being careful not to appear inelegant.
    I watched you talking to the man
    who passed leaning casually against
    the bar, smiling, with your hand on his.
    I saw you laugh and then glance my way
    and notice there had been a change.
    When you finish reading this note,
    look out the window and
    watch me drive away.
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice lil' piece here!!!

    Keep watchin'!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    DIZZZZAMMMM!!!!!!

    U WATCH HER TURNING YA HEAD MAD
    U SAW IT AND
    NOW U KNOW THAT ITS TIME
    AS SHE WATCH U BE GONE AS
    U BLOW SMOKE......
    Ra YA ONE OF A KIND
    TEACHING ME AGAIN !
    FLOW ...
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    RAAAAAAA!!!

    would you please stop amazing me?!
    this was excellent!! i love surprise
    endings & you are the king of those!

    Peace...
    Sunshyne~
     
  5. PoeticMaster

    PoeticMaster Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ya keen eye was open wide shut
    masterful scribe
     
  6. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bill Withers said . . .

    . . . who is he and what is he to you? That's what I want to know.--Ra
     
  7. Destee

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    he's just an old friend
    from long ago
    when you saw us talking
    i was letting him know
    the life of love that we now share
    how no other man could ever compare
    i asked him to join me at our table
    so he could see how you've enabled
    the love and happiness to flow from me
    only to get there and find you gone
    you know Amun-Ra that was wrong
    i'm beat'n yo' a** when i get home

    :lol:

    love it Amun-Ra!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  8. sweettee29

    sweettee29 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HAD TO BRING
    THIS ONE BACK
    FOR IT IS TRULY
    COLD AS ICE
    STR8 UP
    YOU KNOW HOW TO CATCH EMOTION

    ON POINT RA

    SWEETTEE, LOVE​
     
  9. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gotcha! It's like now you see me now you don't. The title definitely fits and this poem's style & layout is phenominal! Write on RA!