Black Poetry : Second posting-need feedback!!!

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  1. Quinessential1

    Quinessential1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fear



    You fear me because of the dynamic appeal and hypnotic delayed

    effect that hidden truths hide with simple lies…averted eyes with

    hurried glances leading to dreams without sleeping.

    Deep are the ways of interaction that give way to the dull ache of

    a touch that never quite satisfies, with thoughts of the perfect

    encounter in a kindred yearning of a love bizarre…I am forced to

    be left totally incomplete.

    Yet the most complete thing that could ever happen between us

    is complete denial…complete denial denying the most complete

    union completing the most natural state a man and woman could ever share.



    Quiet love loudly calls out to me from lips moist with questions

    that may only be asked while being kissed, tasted, and tested.



    Remember me as you try to forget what made you forget to

    remember what made you lose yourself inside that wonderful

    what if that was me…what if time stood still watching a stolen

    kiss taken while standing on a hill of desire…what if fields of

    jasmine and clover concealed the true answer to a lovers

    question that can never be asked…what if morning made love to

    midnight and yesterday created a tomorrow that inspired a

    blissful buffet set before lovers and disguised is as today?
    Would you still fear me?


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  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Second read.. first reply. Desirable traits. Desirable eyes. You look straight into the eyes before you, their glancing around to avoid. Your lasting Quinessential nature.

    " Quiet love being kissed, tasted, and tested." Can't happen until they learn basis. The essential principle.
     
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    PloeMorphic Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bless,
    THis blow was tight, I like it. Nice Flow.
     
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    PloeMorphic Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I meant this "poem" was tight.
     
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