Black Poetry : Second posting first piece-feedback appreciated!!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Quinessential1, Jul 11, 2003.

  1. Quinessential1

    Quinessential1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I Do


    Alluring is befitting of an anomaly that occurs only in my mind…but

    my mind is fertile for the seed you’ve planted…I grow it with the

    uncertain certainty of reaping more than some physical contact…I

    grow it in hopes of reaping something so incredible that love has

    no name for it…something so pleasant and worth while that time

    stands in awe of its power, that envy and jealousy kill each other

    just to gain the approval of what we together share…laughter

    weeps at the simplistic beauty of seamless majestry in motion. I

    now live to receive your gift of you-ness in the realm of free…free

    like the breeze blowing softly through my thoughts while gently

    flowing to places not known and never shown. I could never own

    you…I could only hope to be touched by you in an act of total

    innocence. Is possession an obsession that rewards the caged or

    the cager? Does it give pleasure or support emotional masochistic

    beliefs, sprouted by a one sided non existent move of a non

    traditional approach at a supremely regulated love? I awkwardly

    try to hide behind a myriad boastful rantings orchestrated by

    child-like goings on that are washed away by kisses held close to

    my core. Finally the rains come and the seed is nourished…finally

    the seed grows… finally the seed is nourished and grows

    Strong…
    Deep…
    Stronger…
    Deeper…
    Do
    You
    Feel
    Me? Finally.


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  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Quinessential1

    Your second offering demonstrates the end of a gestation period. Pregnant no more, are the results; given rebirth to an endless, eternal spring called poesy. WELCOME!!!

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  3. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you have me open on your flowz already :jawdrop:
    l anticipate your 3rd peace..
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes indeed the second coming was a grand
    i feel u more then u know
    deep flowin' continue
     
  5. Quinessential1

    Quinessential1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    J'hiah...feel me when I say thanks for reading my words.
     
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