Black Poetry : school paper

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by conflict, Dec 1, 2006.

  1. conflict

    conflict Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is the first poem I have written. It is a paper for my English class. Tell me what you think

    Sonnet
    I want to tell you that I love you so

    I want to tell you that I love you so
    Because you make my heart feel like it’s full
    Of something warm as noon day sun aglow.
    To bring me close your loves almighty pull;
    As gravity doth keep the earth in place.
    We met in spring as young buds meet the frost.
    A summer spent so lively full of grace.
    I wish there was a way we could get lost.
    Before our autumn leaves begin to fall.
    So long as I can spend the fall with you.
    Prepare for winters frosty beckon call.
    My tree is bare and yours snow covered too.
    Heaven awaits a lovely fate. My dear
    Let’s get some rest, we had a lovely year.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    conflict:
    Your scribe was very sweet.
    I hope you read to Sonnet
    after you get your "A".
    :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tasty yes this was awesomely done in da sweet sonnet
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i hope u get an A 4 this. nice write
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words were light an airy, like a feather. Very sweet sentiment here, get ready for your "A".
     
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    Hi conflict
    This was indeed a nice sonnet
    I enjoy the flow of your poem
    your use of the season help to display
    the turning points in life.And that is great
    Keep writing

    Peace & Love
     
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    This writing has a natural essence to it dipped in metaphors. Enjoyed the way it make me felt.
     
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