Black Poetry : school grounds

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Sep 11, 2003.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i was looking at the kids at school today
    they were talking about
    so and so's mama
    who they was gone beat up
    who they got beef "wit"
    i looked at the kids at school today
    fighting.....over ish like
    she called me a *****!
    she got in my face!
    they would hit each other
    in the eyes......blinding their 3rd (i) of the reality of death
    in the lungs.......robbing them of the breath of L.Y.F.E
    (Love.You.For.Ever)
    satan sat, still laughin his *** off :devil:

    "i got another one" he says
    and walks off...
    pimped they souls
    like some hoes

    noone knows that they
    sold their souls to hells grip
    makin poison drip from their
    mouths

    and blaspemy cloud their
    mindz
    untill they can't see clear
    untill gats are their salvation
    and gangs are their baptizem
    into the humanities dark side
    painting the inno(sence)s souls crimson

    :(




    tell me how yall liked it
    its an xperimental piece
    -story
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel you...projecting a deeper message

    yeah...and a little play on words there with life

    the constant battle between good & evil

    ethics...morals...., it's conscious
     
  3. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like it a lot, and yeah its just that crazy... thats how things are these days. wish it didnt have to be like this tho... its just sad...
     
  4. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love yall, glad u felt me on this one
    mcuh love,
    -story
     
  5. SUNkissed

    SUNkissed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you telling the truth with FLAVA....a sad but SO TRUE tale (snaps)
    I like.
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    gladed u liked it sun,
    much love to ya,
    -story
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i liked it alot...you can never go wrong when you piece is full of so much truth and honesty. lot's of love for this one.
     
  8. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks true, truth is the only remedy to our worlds condition
    mcuh love,
    -story
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes story this is nice especially comin from a young princess herself :)
     
  10. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like it a lot, story. Good for you for experimenting with styles. And the message really hits home.
     
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