Black Poetry : ...say my name.

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by elayne., Oct 16, 2002.

  1. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i adore it when he calls me
    sweet things like—
    moon/lyght/myfuturewife
    but when he smiles &
    says: “elayne.”…
    it’s akin to warm wind
    whispering over my wet
    bare skin…
    it’s equivalent to open
    mouth kisses being pressed
    against the small of my
    back… & i lose track of
    coherent thought…
    …i actual-ly get lost
    somewhere between the
    movement of his lips
    & the desire to
    dip the tip of my tongue
    in(to) the indentation that
    denotes the dimple in his
    right cheek… you see…
    a rose by any other name
    would smell just as sweet...
    at least that’s what Shakespeare
    believed… but i want
    myman shouting
    elayne.” when he’s moving
    on top/beneath…
    …inside/behind me
    now!… THAT **** is sweet!
    (& i know you feel me)
    …got me on my knees
    sangin’ ha’mercy choruses of
    please… babybaby please…
    …say my name!
    say… my… ****… name!

    & i ain’t even ashamed
    ‘cause thisLove thing is
    stronger than pride
    & besides… i can’t deny…
    i love the way he says “elayne.”.



    © Nefertiti Days 2002, all rights reserved.
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    elayne....Elayne...ELAYNE.

    Dayum gurl...can't you hear?

    anyway...gotta say that i love the way you played them words, gurlfriend. got me visualizing that "top/beneath… …inside/behind me" thang...while hearing you saying..."say my name...say my name.".:)

    talk about a woman...wading in the sea of love. jeez. happiness is a wonderful thing, my sistah. enjoy it.
     
  3. LadyColtrane

    LadyColtrane New Member MEMBER

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    whew! It's gettin hot in herre, lol! That is a lovely piece miss Elayne. Skillz piled upon mo' skillz! And girl, I know what ya mean!!

    LadyColtrane
     
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    elayne...

    now, i COULD go ahead and speculate as to what event sparked this piece....but that wouldn't be right :)

    this is one of my favorite pieces from you (no b.s.)...I loved the wordplay, the images :D...you're the sh*t, baby

    I love you
     
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    All that can be said, has been said Ms. elayne. All I can do is marvel. Period. :)

    me
     
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    Well I don't know who's business this is or isn't, but for the feelings expressed I can sure relate. And I love the way you described them here Elayne, kind of like it is when you shout love from the roof tops.
     
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    you are a POETESS. that's all I'm gone say.

    verb
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    definitely put a smile on my face...yeah girl.
     
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    ok pot. flo'it!
    do'd'damthang den.......
     
  10. elayne.

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    alwaysthanks.


    alla y'all have dirty minds!! all i was talkin' 'bout
    was how this voice sounds when he says my
    name. this ain't no erotic joynt!! :lol: hahaha

    aiight...

    i.b. imma beat you!! :D
    ladyc. thank you for lettin' me know i am
    felt!! again... welcome to the fam.
    mensi. no speculatin', now! :lol: i'm supa
    happy that you liked it, tho'. :wink:
    you. continue to marvel... itsallverygood!
    sherrie. let vonn & reason speak for them-
    selves... but thanks for your reply!! :tongue:
    gaylee. finally a sane poet responds! :lol:
    thank you dear... i'm glad you liked it.
    garrison. i'm takin' a bow! :D you're sweet!
    red. & i was happy to do it! keep smilin'.
    hiwa. thanks stranger! :nono:

    itsallLove, chirens!!
     
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