Quiet Poetry Lounge : Sand

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  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was created word for word, so it may be a little choppy or confusing.
    Just flowing...you know....


    A walk in the beach
    As the sand intertwines between my feet
    My thoughts drive me
    Up the walls of life and beauty
    What do they mean to me?
    Why do they have me in captivity?
    How do they keep me
    Making promises I tend not to keep?
    Swearing never to return
    To the land of love while its empty?
    When I look around me
    And try to let my mind
    Comprehend what it is that makes me
    Fail to understand the creativity
    Of the earth.
    Why, when all i've known since birth
    Is this earth???
    Why? I cry
    And with my best I try
    To keep my head up high
    Because the pressure from the sky
    Is pushing down on me, gently
    Making me fall to my knees
    Making me accept my reality
    The earth is my enemy
    Yet, it does something to me
    That keeps me intrigued
    Kinda like a "splackavellie".
    My lover beckons me forth
    Into this world of so much remorse
    Guilt and empty pleasures
    Which are forgotten the day forth.
    I put a blessing on this land
    And all the things I don't even understand
    to at least try
    To keep my peace within my own hands.
    Yet the sand...
    The sand has me under captivity.
    The granule of patience and time
    Yet so small, so forgettable.
    This love of mines
    I realize that only the small can make
    something what it is
    as it exists
    every one of us has a weakness.
    "Time,
    Like soup in a cup,
    To precious to waste"
    While written in depression
    it slaps me in the face
    I realize this is the case
    Of the world today.
    I could go on and on but I have nothing left to say...

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  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    splackavellie huh?
    lol...that's tripped out
    tyte scribe...ima hafta
    read this again cause i could not
    grasp the full meaning the first time
    good one...that doesn't happen that much
    peace
    khasm
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice flow!
     
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    Soullyricist Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayum....I really like this right here. nice...very nice
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    loved this flow here
     
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    hi nice flow PlayWitItPimp05
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  7. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for all of da love!!!
    Hope I helped to inspire some!!!

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