Black Poetry : Salt in My Sugar

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I heard a lullaby
    Then a funeral dirge played
    Passed by abandoned lot full of weeds
    Peered thru a florists' window with lilies displayed

    Savored a strawberry ice cream cone
    Vomited a mad cow when Pepto failed
    Got angry when I was falsely accused without a trial
    Felt triumphant, shackles were removed and truth prevailed

    That embrace made me toasty amid the blizzard
    This vice grip made me so frozen in fear
    Got drunk from the whine of my soul's agony, but sobered up
    when my cup overflowed with a joy that was utterly sheer

    So much happiness and sadness at the same time
    Irony overwhelms my day
    I'm hoping that the tears won't over power the laughter
    And drown out every giddy utterance that I say
    It's bad enough that the salt stings the wounds, even worse would be
    to allow the salt to taint the sugar and take all the sweetness away...
     
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    Great flow Watz

    This flow has bitter sweet expressions that are expressed so beautifully.

    " Got angry when I was falsely accused without a trial
    Felt triumphant, shackles were removed and truth prevailed "


    Powerful moment. It does feel triumphant when truth is revealed.

    Don't ever let the sadness of a moment or day. Take away the sweet song in your heart. You support and inspire so many, I just hope we do the same.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hodee, your responses tend to embrace the poetry so well, thus making the poet feel embraced. I appreciate that brother, thank you.
     
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    the title says it all

    you know what they say the glass is half full/empty

    i say the salt didn't take all the sugar

    there's alot of sugar left

    peace
     
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    this depth of poetry has open minds and yes what a bitter feel when it's over and under
     
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    Bitter with the sweet what a combination
    but funny how it always seems to happen that way.
    Lovely write watz


    Much Luv
     
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    I hope there's plenty of sugar left So'ja, thanks for your response brotha.
    The agony and the ecstacy at the same time can leave a bitter taste, thank you brotha Rich.
    Yes, it is strange that life can be just that way, thank you 4Everluv.
     
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    We must ask ourselves, does "salt" have it's place in our life? ...it sure does, for if it didn't...what would we compare our "sugar" too?
    As the "Cold" complements "Hot"...our bittersweet moments don't mean a whole lot.
    it may appear that the "Salt" is leading the crop
    but...
    The "Sugar over Salt" ...will come out on top
    Excellent piece poet, your style is outstanding!! :bowdown:
     
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    There's bound to be some salt, but it's time to worry when the salt overpowers the sugar. Let's hope the sugar stays in abundance. Thank you kindly for your words, Sister queent, much appreciated.
     
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    grammatically powerful

    your adjectives were on point.

    salt maybe deemed necessary and sugar maybe the biggest drug.

    keep a tight leash on your hate and be everso careful who you love.
     
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