Black Poetry : Sadness (MY CHALLENGE TO TRINITI)

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my face was stone,
    it was engraving in my soul
    this weakness that seeped into my soul
    and suspended in my atmospere...

    i couldn't breath,
    couldn't sleep,
    it was only the rememberance of u
    that kept me alive,
    yet killed me,

    i fingered the corners
    inscribing my names
    on the seems in the walls

    darkness overwhelmed me.....

    my spirit broken,
    my heart shattered,
    in a million peices....

    i couldn't take it....
    i kept thinking of his
    eyes that seemed to bore
    a hole in my stomach..
    when i told him the news......

    his anger took the form
    of a fist that struck
    me till i couldn't see

    my third eye was blind.....
    i couldn't see....

    i experience a pain
    that painted the features on my face
    in a melancholy form....

    i want to scream
    to reach into his throat
    and pull out every foul
    word that he said
    and make him eat it again...

    the bitterness he would taste
    in his stomach,
    the nausia would overtake him
    pulling him into a fetal position...

    i lingered in a limbo state....
    Bound and unbound....
    here and there....
    lost and found.....


    much love
    -story
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well done ....but no battle to clash
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Don't get me wrong, i look at triniti, as a sister, BUT competition is competition,
    but if she does win, im not one to act all stank....sooooo let the best woman win....
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    Awwwww brotha Rich its Ok :) :grouphug: I Love u too :) but I'm a big gurl and baby gurl wanted some so here we go ;)
     
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    …………………………
    …………………………………….
    …………………………………………………
    ……………………………………………………………

    lost
    …….simply……
    …………………..lost………
    revolving dissipating recollections of a
    …now… tainted connection
    crying out to me
    decimating the walls of WE
    till there is no more YOU
    there is no more I
    there is
    no
    more…
    to……
    Be
    simply graveyard gatherings
    of a supposed love

    “darkness overwhelmed me”

    snatching my soul into depression
    the shards of shattered dreams
    cutting…deep…deeper still…
    into my spirit seething…pain
    as I bled…
    …………and bled….
    ……………………….and bled…..
    ………..….I BLEED…………
    my rivers ran red with the sorrows of
    with my bodily strength
    my spiritual wealth depleted
    as you robbed me
    ME
    you robbed ME
    after u claimed you loved ME
    beat me and battered me
    took my kindness and love
    with the skill of a thug
    and with the same eyes that made love
    to….
    …….me…..
    you broke…
    …………..me……….
    and KILLED and SLAUGHTERED
    our
    ….WE…
    stripping me…
    ……….ripping me….bit by bit….ripping…ME
    of my remaining energy
    ravaging my sense of peace
    annihilating my sense of ease
    as I lay there eyes wide shut
    wounds wide open
    soul scarred
    mind marred
    body….broken…into pieces of pieces of pieces of…
    nothing

    wind whispers of tears cried yesterday
    blowing through my tomorrow and today
    demolished and disintegrated
    the “love” I had anticipated
    now eating away at my being
    minds eye black and blue from the shame it was seeing
    in my mirrors reflection

    contemplations of the other woman
    the other woman…
    the…other…woman…
    am I…the…..other…woman…
    left with no ground to stand on
    no breath to breathe on
    no life to live on
    how can I… go on
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice, this was truly a work of art.....BUT im still going to beat u...i'm writing my next poem now......after another round, we let the people decide,see ya in a few...
    -story
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i lay here...
    in between nothing...
    settleing on my sheets....
    staring into space...
    i looked over and saw my heart
    on the ground....

    it was dead...
    blood crept in the cracks
    of the walls...

    i touched the side of my face
    it was dented in,
    my eye black....

    sweat creased my brow
    and i swore a million
    curses that swirled
    outside with the wind....

    i was cold...
    i couldn't feel
    couldn't speak....

    everything was incomprehensible
    i was untouched, unfelt,
    unwanted....

    scars relinquished my soul
    made me weak,
    i couldn't cry....

    tears had failed me...
    i couldn't speak...
    my mouth was plastered shut....
    i couldn't hear, my eyes were closed
    to reason.....

    i was destoryed

    to be continued...
     
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    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa...

    lQQking......
    story and Trin...yall got it going on...4 sho
    Battle of the pens can't wait to see who wins...
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOA.... :huh:

    Both flows are so gripping...but huh,

    Can I cast my ballot now...

    Cuz...Somebody just ripped this page... :huh:

    I'm not one to judge but...uh ur uh...

    It's a tight race...

    Story...you done gone and threw down the gauntlet...

    I await the next round.... :angel1:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yall stay tuned nah...gone be somemore fo' the day out....buy the way, Triniti, in the next round.....lets talk about love, im geting kinda gloomy up in here...
     
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