Black Poetry : SACLTCO

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  1. thatslife

    thatslife New Member MEMBER

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    It is said that the mind controls the body. So then that means the body does not have a mind of it's own. However, I have proven this statement false; unless I have two minds, or better yet, two heads. Two heads that don't think on one accord and the head of the flesh has proven to be more powerful than the mind.

    SIN/SIN

    A moment's gratification can be a lifetime of repentance.
    Sin I'm I in subjection to.
    The curves of the damsel is my subjugator.
    From the inviting beauty of her countenance,
    To the alluring pulchritude of structure.
    Her frame so splendid.
    Her smile of pleasant chastity.
    I fell in love with this dame.
    I wanted her for my own.
    But she continually rejected me,
    And still she turned me on.

    Alone, at last!
    The day I changed my meekly tone.
    Melt my lips across her delicate face
    Embraced her waist
    As she hinted my love, removed from her place.
    But smiled with an enchanting glow.
    And still rejected my request to go with the flow.
    And she stooped over to collect the leaf,
    The leaf that caused us both everlasting grief.

    Induced I am.
    Removed my heat
    Resting it gently between the crease of her pleats.
    Aghast,
    She jumps to a stand and smacked me on the cheek.
    Annoyed,
    I grabbed her legs and sweep her off her feet.
    Rested her down to experience the least of her dreams.
    I duck-taped her smile to cease her screams.
    Pinned down her strength, spreading her knees.
    Ripped away the sexy underwear
    And rubbed my nose in her kinky hair.
    Powered up and fully grown,
    I tore through her compressed walls, creating a bloody flow.
    She twisted and turned with powerless might
    Mumbling screams and "no's"
    Provoking my sexual appetite.
    Thrusting harder with vigorous speed,
    I whispered, " baby you know this is what I need".
    She became motionless and discontinued her agonizing plead.
    Maybe she's in dead fright
    Her only movement are her raining tears.
    Yeah dawg, she's given up the fight.
    As I glanced at her countenance, no longer is it full of light.
    Her eyes fixed firmly at the ceiling,
    It's like I've taken her life.
    I buried my head in the small of her shoulder.
    All of a sudden the room got a whole lot colder.
    And eventhough my mind is telling me,
    What I was doing was terribly wrong.
    The words of my second head was still stroking strong.
    And in her unwelcoming, but comforting walls,
    I put out my fire.
    Breathing loudly in her ear, as my weak body transpired.
    I glanced once more at her expressionless face.
    Her eyes still fixed at the ceiling.
    I kissed my pretty damsel on her face
    And selfishly proceeded to tell her my feelings.
    That truely I loved her and didn't want to hurt her in anyway.
    I removed the tape,
    And ask, "Is there anything you wish to say?"
    Eventhough she never spoke,
    The tears that ran down her face
    Told me of the amount of hate,
    She felt for me.
    So gently I rolled onto my feet,
    Dressed myself
    And quietly leaved.
    My flesh so content,
    But my mind full of greif.

    A moment's gratification is a lifetime of repentance.
    Sin I'm I subjected to.
    The curves of the damsel is my subjugator.
    Sexual Addiction can lead to Criminal Offenses.
    Sin on top of Sin.
    My apologies to the Queen
    Whereever she may be.
    May you please forgive me.
    Peace.

    Thanks for allowing me to share my piece.
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow.......i really like this piece....look forward to more...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome from above to the family of bonded love
    welcome dis well pose flow u scribe and da smoothness
    happy ya upon us to share as we embrace and love
    forth love given unto given back ...........Tyte scribe poet!
    :) :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  4. angelicsage

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    Whoa......................and wow! Your writing is tremendous, your
    message even stronger.

    Welcome!
    Angelic
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Detailed.. piece here. Good first scribe.

    A true scribe of the head up, head down issue. Which one controls the man?

    Head up.. takes the control to move the feet and arms. Head down takes control.. they pour on the charm. Emotions are stronger than mere movements and thought. That form of taking is a kiss goodbye. Given when they are loosing the pie. So they take their piece, they slander. Give grief. They pillage her pride and life. Your right this is a snap of what they are told. "thatslife"

    Welcome to Destee. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
     
  6. thatslife

    thatslife New Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the luv though this work may not be as loving.
    I hear you here HODEE.
     
  7. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jawdrop: oh my...this was fluently felt...vivid write my brother
     
  8. blaquebutterfli

    blaquebutterfli Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm with my sister triniti :jawdrop:
    that was most fluent, real
    painful to experience, therein lies the beauty
     
  9. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is beautiful. deep and descriptive. just beautiful
     
  10. Khasm13

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    yeah... i agree...
    this was a tyte first scribe...
    welcome to da fam...
    peace
    khasm