Black Poetry : Ryhme Scheme & Bars (Just F.Y.I.)

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  1. Tantrum

    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Please Read 4 Whoever Finds This Helpful
    these are bars the / lets u know its the ens of that bar
    the ryhme scheme is simple to read not complex
    but it gives you an idea of basic ryhming and bar break down
    uno


    My words flow like rivers brush off banks
    Im always full never running on empty tanks/
    My words bridge the gap kick haters off planks
    Drown your hatred like white boys and titanic sank/
    Im gone off that wild rose and plenty of dank
    My hood call it hydro-I call it that crank/
    And this aint april fools-fool you get pranked
    Walking that green mile and I aint talking tom hanks/
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Da anks was smooth
    like bustin a groove
    dat had me all move
    this was really cool
     
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    thanks $$rich$$
    just trying to explain to people
    a basic breakdown of how you can diversify

    example

    1.poetry flows but his/he-sit son (hesitation) got him scared of the world

    2.funny shaped like a pear one L short of having a pearl

    see what i mean
    thanks for the love again rich
     
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    we need to have a rule for real
    and i will say it again if u want more replies
    show more love to other poets
    not just posting on one and then posting ur either
    i think cats should respond to poets all the time
    thats another poetry f.y.i.
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    f.y.i.
    poets we should all do a mass poetry colab one day
    we should pick a topic and do it that way
    and also we should have a poetry contest
    we have enough poets this shouldnt take long to do
    what do u all think
     
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    TANTRUM i feel all of your views brother str8 up
    and this flo here is super tight

    Im gone off that wild rose and plenty of dank
    My hood call it hydro-I call it that crank/
    And this aint april fools-fool you get pranked
    Walking that green mile and I aint talking tom hanks

    my fav part

    you slammed it

    much much love sweettee29
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ty
    just showing ppl different ways to flow
    glad you was feeling that-trying to help ppl elevate
    become a little more complex in there ryhmes
    uno
     
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    Tantrum, Have you ever read Caged Bird, Phenominal Woman or the thousands of other poems by professionals which are not written in "bars"? Many of them don't even make an attempt at rhyming. All poems are not and SHOULD not be AB AB or AA BB rhyme schemes because our feelings do not necessarily fit into that neat little box.

    I own a small record company and know how to write in bars just as all of my rappers do. However, this is not a rap fourm. Thanks for the info tho.
     
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    yeah i understand what you are saying
    i totally agree with that-but some poems i read
    the structure is so bad its hard to understand
    so this was just some tidbits to help people out
    and ur right all poems will not ryhme
    thanks for the response
    uno
     
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