Black Poetry : ROUND 2

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by 1poetsought, Jun 5, 2007.

  1. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wrestle with the open truth

    Lose a fight the judges took

    Gamble in salvation stakes

    Manage then a doubter's take

    Cognizant of God's beguile

    Outfoxed by the other guy

    Man to man...

    Where souls are spent

    Leap of faith heaven-sent

    Slip and slide the devil's wile

    Winning souls immortalized

    Rectify your loser's PRIDE

    Take the count of e-i-g-h-t



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    aka 1poetsought ~ copyright 2007
     
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    Taking sides with the devil, will eventually, always have you down for the count. God is waiting. Enjoying your vibe 1poet.
     
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    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    1poso

    what it do? i like the wordplay here. may i suggest using more words like cognisant to deepen reader's vocab. i love it, though!
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    the time is near

    yes yes
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling dat time so close ......word up bruh !
     
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    I think I just wanna lay here and not even get up. This knocked me out! I'm a let it just simmer in the mind some more, but it was a TKO Tight Kreation Overall!
     
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