Black Poetry : Rose of a Naked Stem

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  1. whisper

    whisper Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was the rose
    rose of a naked stem
    that stood alone ...... among the bush
    and then your thorns came along
    n-twine me, wrapped around me
    then squeezed me
    you squeezed me tight scrape up against me
    even scratched me ...something wasnt right

    you even made me bleed

    but you could not break this naked stem
    cause the ROSE carrys the seed.
    the seeds you tried to blow away
    but these protected me.

    THEN your stem began to brown
    (i guess your roots were dying)
    being a ROSE OF A NAKED STEM
    i opened up my petals
    but once again you stuck me
    stuck me in the ear
    SOMEONE must have heard my cry
    along came MR.shears
     
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    nice flow i like it
     
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    really really vibin on this, whisper. what a dope concept. and way to be strong.
     
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    whisper Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks mzblkangel and gempis just a little venting out
     
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    Loved It

    THEN your stem began to brown
    (i guess your roots were dying)
    being a ROSE OF A NAKED STEM
    i opened up my petals
    but once again you stuck me
    stuck me in the ear
    SOMEONE must have heard my cry
    along came MR.shears

    -Whisper
    ____________________________

    A SCREAM! :toast:
     
  6. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice imagery...i loves the way this flowed...much love for this one.
     
  7. whisper

    whisper Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you
    1poetsought and truelove somtime i like to thrash back in metaphor style.
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    most welcome cause i enjoyed the read my friend
     
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    a very nice blend
    in your flow
    feeling you on the metaphor
    Peace
     
  10. whisper

    whisper Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you bluewater. happy to know you liked it
     
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