Black Poetry : ritual (for the fellas)

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  1. Giovanni

    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    every Thursday at Tryst,
    over a back table, Jati
    whips out his dominos case,
    Fred rolls up his sleeves

    the clinic`s open, yo
    ...who tryna see the doctor first?


    through late crowd chatter
    and the transitory pythons
    rising from cigarettes,
    Derrick shakes his head
    as we eye the little bit’a flesh,
    flashing over their Lowriders

    brutha you see...that...sis, maaann
    whole lotta backyard on that one


    our trance broken
    as Jati shuffles the bones
    knocking each other like cowries
    hanging off cornrows

    10 points to get on

    Fred arranges his hands,
    making sure the 6/6 we
    checking for ain`t resting in
    his palms. i chuckle
    before he looks up

    Fred i`ma put a FOR SALE
    sign in front cho` clinic

    yeah whatever yo


    © 2004 Alan King
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Nice storytelling style! LOVED IT!

    Yo! It's not just the fella's that like to spin them bones.
    I learned em as a little girl when the park was my second home.
    Learning from the old guys with tobacco stained teeth, they
    smiled as I waited patiently for someone to play with me.
    They offered to teach me all the tricks and how to pop a lick.
    And most of all they taught me was how to drop a brick...
    Before I knew it, and ever blew it, I knew a nick was five and
    fity was fifty! Gimme some of that play any day...
    And I play to this day! CHIPS ANYONE?
    Loved it ...MORE MORE MORE!
    BLESSINGS ON YOUR HOUSE! :huh:
     
  4. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This took me there...

    Sittin' at the table countin' 'em up.

    Nice.
     
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    Very nice read.
     
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    Thanks for taking us to a comfortable scene...very nice.
     
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