Quiet Poetry Lounge : Rewind, Caught in the Heat, Scene 1

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Apr 7, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Her phone is ringing. She answers.

    He says...
    I'm reading you this love letter
    because I don't know how to say
    that your spirit is penetrating mine
    to the point that mine has lost it's way.
    Don't know what to do with this feeling
    that invades my psyche too sweetly
    That image of you is a constant mirage of
    what I desire, but can't have completely.
    I see my essence in your eyes,
    I feel the rapture in your touch
    I hear a symphony in your voice
    The taste of those lips is too much.
    I can wait to have you darling,
    But this ache has taken me whole
    You are the muse of my poetry
    And lady you have consumed my soul.

    She says....
    Words escape me as well,
    phrases cannot possibly convey
    how I am drawn to you,
    or why I always feel this way.
    Your feelings have spun a web
    around my heart, ensnaring love's core
    and after hearing the words you speak
    you have captured me all the more.
    Your flow weighs heavy on my mind,
    like the weight of all sonnets ever written,
    like the force of gravity within us
    driving us together, smitten.
    Oh, to absorb all of you into me
    so we could possibly merge into we.
    I speak sincerely unto thee,
    Go passionately words, I set you free.


    Caught in the heat of passion, these two.
    Cut. That's a wrap.
     
  2. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am speechless that was........i.n.d.e.s.c.r.i.b.a.b.l.e I like that a lot cuz it's like my reality only we're friends,but he said it in his poetry mm mm mm I like this a lot :hot: :hot:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was too sweet awesome flowing
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much for your kind words, Sensualreality. You are quite lucky to have a friend like that.
    Rich, thank you for letting me know that you are liking this one. Wasn't sure where I was going to go from scene 2.
     
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    I feeling with one also, you got talent!!! and thats speaken light!!! :hot:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gee, thanks, TheOne, I appreciate the compliment. I am enjoying your scribes as well.
     
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    Absolutely Brilliant! I loved the way you laid this down!
    No doubt about it. This piece here,... IS HOT!
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now, I don't quite know what to say to this, Purplemoons, thank you so much for the luv shown for this piece.
     
  9. skalion

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    He caresses her soul and her essence fills his spirit.

    N-U-B-I-A-N L-O-V-E !!!!!

    Flow on is all I can say Bredren
    :toast:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you skalion I appreciated your words sincerely.
     
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