Black Poetry : (revised) just thoughts

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My heart cries of you
    And hoping it is true….
    Knowing love is not fair….
    When it comes to me…
    Stab betrayed mistreated
    in every way
    Killing me inside…..
    for I played the fool
    first time
    second time almost
    third time but I got out
    I cant do it a fourth time….
    I don’t want to be the fool…..
    In your game….
    there are various types of games to be played
    you play some for fun-others for pay
    there’s one that’s played, and I am
    Not tryin to be your fool….
    Used
    Abused
    Destroyed
    Belittled I been there….
    As my heart broke and I was ashame
    Cryin in my room hiding out
    So no one can see….dark and lonely
    Hurting out of control…..but this time
    Now I have to look out for me…
    See I am trying not to get
    my heart ripped out..feeling as if I been
    raped of my soul and my spirit just leaves…
    as my pride folds…
    just don’t want to be a fool…in
    that game…..
    you know the one
    filled with knowledge
    and not the kind you learn in school
    the knowledge is filled
    with tricks from the streets
    as you try to be slick in
    trying to beat the one that love you,
    so don’t try to control my heart
    as well as my mind that will requires skills
    in which along the way I pick up
    tricks of the trade…..
    see its many perpetrators in
    world searching hard for a piece of fame
    you wont be allowed to get that fame
    by my blame…..so in the end who
    really wins? Your still alone
    using your worthless skills…as you
    killed what was of us…..

    (still needs work)

    A blkangel thang
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    reverse order indeed
    tyte drop sistah
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks rich glad ya likes
    it was a poem i had post but never
    finish....thank you for the support
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    indeed most welcome sistah
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hot ****, been there, felt this, really felt this, but could never put it into the words you choose so carefully. The pen is a mighty weapon.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for da love sis
    glad u likes..
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    be no ones fool...
    tyte piece sis
    one love
    khasm
     
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    I feel the depth in the piece. I feel the words jumping out directly attacking me. I love this one.
     
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    OK now WHAT did u say was WRONG wit it QQ
    QQ
    QQ
    QQ
    Mmmmhmmm
    :lol:
     
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