Black Poetry : RESENTFUL COMPASSION

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by mzpoetic8705, Jan 26, 2005.

  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are poetic'ly beautiful, and for me
    To compare thee to a harp is of no thought
    You are a unique, sensual beauty
    Waiting to be caressed by your words...ought
    To yield to your sly ways of approachin'
    These poetic'ly inclined human beings
    So let's go back to the beginning, when
    Poetry was effortless melodies
    When we'd lie defenseless beneath the blue
    Sky, using the stars as our pen to write
    The never ending, sincere thoughts of you
    And I, would give anything for that night
    To last, if ev'ry short battle dies long
    When will these unseen tears 4 you go on?

    -MzPoetic8705 :new:
     
  2. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was very well put, and the shortness of the length made the feeling after reading it long. short and sweet is what i say.....continue....one love
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautiful sweet short flow here tyte.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hi mzpoetic :) I dont recall if i said hi :)

    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:

    I really was feelin "effortless melodies" :read:

    welcome and welcome and welcome :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    uppin this tyte drop it's resentful wit compassion
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am diggin this tight flow - you dropped it like it's hot, yo.
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so nice :)
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hmmm...that was a powerful ending
    nice...very, very nice
    I loved that part the most
    Nice Scribe poet...keep up the good work!
     
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    geegee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i agree! this was a very well put poem that spoke BIG but with less words! Good job my sista...well done!
     
  10. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    u posed this so well very nice flow...Angel
     
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