Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Gaylee, Aug 12, 2002.
You can be replaced
with a ballpoint pen you know
my internet friend
"pardon my language"
yet ya pen can dry
but my heart runs so deeper
da replacement theme
dis was too deep, yet true. Ya pen done did a replacement !
senryu , a Japanese poem structurally similar to the haiku but primarily concerned with human nature. It is usually humorous or satiric. Used loosely, the term means a poem similar to the haiku that does not meet the criteria for haiku. (FROM THE DICTIONARY)
lol, but an excellant example of SENRYU (not SANRYU, hehe)
It has the humor and satire, and apparently the correct syllable combinations, so Kudos!
I did like it, and I certainly, as you know, couldn't do better, smiling.
Now, who can be replaced, chuckle (tongue in cheek)?
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