Black Haiku : Replacement (Smilin, is this Sanryu?)

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  1. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You can be replaced
    with a ballpoint pen you know
    my internet friend
     
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    "pardon my language"

    ****!

    alyce
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yet ya pen can dry
    but my heart runs so deeper
    da replacement theme

    dis was too deep, yet true. Ya pen done did a replacement !
     
  4. smilin_dwarf

    smilin_dwarf Active Member MEMBER

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    Close, it's:

    senryu , a Japanese poem structurally similar to the haiku but primarily concerned with human nature. It is usually humorous or satiric. Used loosely, the term means a poem similar to the haiku that does not meet the criteria for haiku. (FROM THE DICTIONARY)

    lol, but an excellant example of SENRYU (not SANRYU, hehe)
    It has the humor and satire, and apparently the correct syllable combinations, so Kudos!
    I did like it, and I certainly, as you know, couldn't do better, smiling.
    Now, who can be replaced, chuckle (tongue in cheek)?
     
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