Black Poetry : Renewal - ATTENTION POETS!!! NEED YOUR FEEDBACK ON THIS ONE!!!

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  1. Bishop

    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Analyze and let me know what you see.....


    I ‘m moving yet I’m not walking
    Lying horizontally I see all
    Feel the tears of emotional outpour
    Hear words of those who seem not to know me
    Music playing
    Singing
    Yet from whence it comes I know not
    Soft kisses to the cheek
    Yet I cannot reciprocate
    Can’t even speak
    Moving yet again still not walking
    Images of buildings and city streets
    I know this place and yet again I don’t
    Stopped moving
    In the distance
    The sound of the waves of the sea is no more
    Unusual for its roar never ceases
    Yet for some reason its quiet
    Voices
    Crying
    Praying
    In the distance I see a lighthouse
    Its beacon dimmed
    As if never to shine again
    In the air
    A friend flies to a magical kingdom in the sky
    Yet he stops to circle overhead
    Brother not in his usual place of watching
    But for some reason he is here with me
    Puzzling
    Confusing
    Then
    Out of nowhere
    Darkness
    Covering
    Can’t breathe
    But there is no need
    Light shining
    Is it the Lighthouse?
    No
    Brighter
    Blinding
    Glorious
    Warming
    Transmuting
    Instilling in me true love
     
  2. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    Light shining brighter than The Lighthouse ...

    it must be God
     
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    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...its comforting

    ...to know that were a watched
    and protected in a way that
    man cannot even do for us...
    alone...

    spirituality...yes!!
     
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    Juicylv4u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Spiritual

    I felt a sense of peace reading this.
    a sense of comfort in the arms of our Father as he make us aware of our surroundings:)
     
  5. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OTAY!

    Analyzed and accepted--a nice piece with a different flow--but effective--kept me reading while at the same time thinking for underlying possibilities--I liked it--ra
     
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    HEAVEN...that's where I am going too!! I strive to make it there everyday. Jesus is the way the truth and the light. No man shall come to the Father but by ME (Jesus)!!

    The greatest commandment.....Love one another!!

    Your poem was great!
     
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    That's what I see....When I read this, I see you stepping out of yourself to freedom. Most call it death, but It's freedom. You see people kissing you, singing, but you can't give it back. They are mourning the physical, but you're free....you've succeeded.
     
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    I see it from another sense...
     
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    I also see it from two different angles...

    it may be about dying in the physical sense..

    but it could also talk about being in a deep depression where you are aware of your surroundings but not responsive...the light you see could be the new you emerging from the darkness..your spiritual self reborn...

    K
     
  10. nini08

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    that was beautiful. i have to agree w/ Kitana....i also saw it 2 ways at first but then toward the end i realized it was talkin more about leavin this place. it touched me deeply.....more than u will ever know. Thanx.
     
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